Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion

by WavemasterRyx Tue Nov 05, 2013 9:52 pm

*hugs you gently* I'm sure it'll be okay, Somber, just try your best. If it ends up being a long chapter I'm certain the people that matter won't hold it against you.

by O. Hinds Tue Nov 05, 2013 9:58 pm

SilentCarto wrote:
Ch. 55 wrote:“Are you okay?” Eclipse asked as she knelt beside him. He glanced up in time to see the glittering mesh descend down and land firmly atop her inky head. Suddenly the machine let out a massive mechanical shriek, and the screens went wild.
Ch. 26 wrote:A housing burst apart as the metallic guts spilled out, rearranging themselves and creeping towards us. Green lightning flickered and danced along the writhing mechanical surfaces as they formed claws and tendrils.

“GIVE IT TO ME!” those thousand voices screamed at once.

That was a face… the machines were forming a massive pony face! It was slowly pushing out of the machinery as if the gargantuan monster was being birthed from the equipment. Green light blazed from its eyes as it opened its mouth and vomited dozens of electrical cables that crackled and snaked towards us.
Ch. 26 wrote:Spell Matrix 7> Details: Come to Life Spell. ERROR. Data Corrupted.
Huh... I wonder...

P.S. In that first quote, there should be a comma after "suddenly".

Ah, thank you.

by Scienza Wed Nov 06, 2013 10:15 am

Also, Kkat's posted the new one.

Crystal Empire Blues (Part 2)

by **RoboRed** Wed Nov 06, 2013 10:54 am

Damn, beat me to it. :P

by Derpmind Wed Nov 06, 2013 12:45 pm

Well, this is perfect: Fallout Equestria in a nutshell

Somber wrote:At 26p. It's a big horrible chapter. I don't want to split it in two. I want the Thunderhead arc over with and then into the Core and Finale.... uuugh...

I BELIEVE IN YOU SOMBER!

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by Vergil Wed Nov 06, 2013 4:33 pm

Somber wrote:At 26p. It's a big horrible chapter. I don't want to split it in two. I want the Thunderhead arc over with and then into the Core and Finale.... uuugh...

AWESOME!

by Captain Stramash Wed Nov 06, 2013 5:09 pm

Whew just finished up to chapter 61 really enjoying the story so far, great job Somber and co haven't been able to put it down. Looking forward to chapter 62 and whats about to kick off as a result!

On another topic, am I the only one that reads the highlander ponies with a Scots accent rather than a Southern accent?

by Moodyman90 Wed Nov 06, 2013 6:41 pm

I don't think you're the only one, as Highlander does bring to mind Scotland. Or in the very least that one awesome film and the franchise based around it with no direct sequel what so ever.

That said, and granted I am bias as I am Southern, I rather enjoy them having southern accent. Especially so since the state of Georgia has a rich Scottish heritage, to the point we have our own Highlander games. Caber toss and all.

Dear me where are my manners, welcome to the site and I hope you stick around. We're mostly a friendly bunch but different opinions do cause tension at times. Like all other sites follow the rules and if an Admin or Moderator tells you to stop doing something, its for the best to do what they say.

by Guest Wed Nov 06, 2013 6:56 pm

Halloa Captain. Suppose I never really heard them as all that Scottish, myself, though I can definitely see how that would come up.

by SilentCarto Thu Nov 07, 2013 1:22 am

Somber wrote:At 26p. It's a big horrible chapter. I don't want to split it in two. I want the Thunderhead arc over with and then into the Core and Finale.... uuugh...

If I ever thought you wrote a long chapter, I would go look at FOE Ch. 37. Then I'd go look at any chapter of Murky whatsoever. Then I'd stop thinking it was a long chapter.

Seriously, though, it's not like anyone's ever complained...

by SilentCarto Thu Nov 07, 2013 1:25 am

Captain Stramash wrote:On another topic, am I the only one that reads the highlander ponies with a Scots accent rather than a Southern accent?

Nope, I do that too. Calamity and New Appleoosa have the southern twang, Highlanders are Scottish. I pretty much do this in complete opposition to their written dialect, but there you go.

by Scienza Thu Nov 07, 2013 8:57 am

Somber wrote:At 26p. It's a big horrible chapter. I don't want to split it in two. I want the Thunderhead arc over with and then into the Core and Finale.... uuugh...

A really long chapter that ends the arc meaningfully is infinitely preferable to a short one which rushes everything.

Trust me, we like long. We wouldn't have been able to read the fifty billion words of PH if we were scared of it. Spike

by O. Hinds Thu Nov 07, 2013 1:36 pm

Regarding BAON:

To anyone who's completely baffled by this post: WavemasterRyx wrote a short AU (very AU) fic about Blackjack and Glory going to pick flowers. Link.

by Captain Stramash Thu Nov 07, 2013 2:21 pm

@SilentCarto, ha glad I am not the only one, then again I'm from Scotland on the lowland highland border so that probably makes me just a little biased.

in regards to chapter 62 I am with Scienza and SilentCarto, if it needs to be long it needs to be long and it would be better to have a long fulfilling chapter that wraps the arc up nicely than several fragmented chapters that might diminish the impact of the grande finale in Thunderhead.

Personally I wouldn't mind a long chapter since I tend to wolf my way through stories but that's just me.

by Scienza Thu Nov 07, 2013 3:48 pm

Captain Stramash wrote:@SilentCarto, ha glad I am not the only one, then again I'm from Scotland on the lowland highland border so that probably makes me just a little biased.

in regards to chapter 62 I am with Scienza and SilentCarto, if it needs to be long it needs to be long and it would be better to have a long fulfilling chapter that wraps the arc up nicely than several fragmented chapters that might diminish the impact of the grande finale in Thunderhead.

Personally I wouldn't mind a long chapter since I tend to wolf my way through stories but that's just me.

Aye, same. I ran through Project Horizons from chapters 1-30 the first time round.

And they're definitely Scottish.

I forgot to mention this, but welcome to the site. Hold on to your headcanon, it'll clash with someone else's soon.

by Somber Thu Nov 07, 2013 4:06 pm

... I am SUCH a fucking failwriter. I am looking at 29 pages. 17k words... and they're covering ALL OF HALF A FRIGGING HOUR! That's almost a minute per page... and I haven't even gotten to the second half of the chapter!!!! ARRRGU BLARGH BLARGH BLARGH!

by O. Hinds Thu Nov 07, 2013 4:18 pm

So lots of detail is a bad thing now?

by Exodus Hero Thu Nov 07, 2013 4:33 pm

Somber wrote:... I am SUCH a fucking failwriter. I am looking at 29 pages. 17k words... and they're covering ALL OF HALF A FRIGGING HOUR! That's almost a minute per page... and I haven't even gotten to the second half of the chapter!!!! ARRRGU BLARGH BLARGH BLARGH!

man you made my day with that post, I couldn't stop laughing for a good five minutes.

by Tytan Thu Nov 07, 2013 5:12 pm

Somber wrote:... I am SUCH a fucking failwriter. I am looking at 29 pages. 17k words... and they're covering ALL OF HALF A FRIGGING HOUR! That's almost a minute per page... and I haven't even gotten to the second half of the chapter!!!! ARRRGU BLARGH BLARGH BLARGH!

Trust in your editors.

by Captain Stramash Thu Nov 07, 2013 6:16 pm

Maybe this will help Somber.

When your trying to write
and face a great plight.

Write it up rough,
get down all your stuff.

Time to get tough
and get rid of all that guff.

Buff Buff Buff
get rid off all that fluff

Keep going till your out of puff
and have had enough.

Now it really shines
Better than your greatest designs.

I am no Burns but hey not bad for on the spot.
Keep at it pal you'll make it, that I am sure of.

by Vergil Thu Nov 07, 2013 6:28 pm

Somber wrote:... I am SUCH a fucking failwriter. I am looking at 29 pages. 17k words... and they're covering ALL OF HALF A FRIGGING HOUR! That's almost a minute per page... and I haven't even gotten to the second half of the chapter!!!! ARRRGU BLARGH BLARGH BLARGH!

Are you trying to give me an awesome overload sir?

KEEEEP GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOING!

by **RoboRed** Thu Nov 07, 2013 6:29 pm

Somber wrote:... I am SUCH a fucking failwriter. I am looking at 29 pages. 17k words... and they're covering ALL OF HALF A FRIGGING HOUR! That's almost a minute per page... and I haven't even gotten to the second half of the chapter!!!! ARRRGU BLARGH BLARGH BLARGH!

I hunger for a multitude of verbage.

by OneMoreDaySK Thu Nov 07, 2013 7:24 pm

Somber wrote:... I am SUCH a fucking failwriter. I am looking at 29 pages. 17k words... and they're covering ALL OF HALF A FRIGGING HOUR! That's almost a minute per page... and I haven't even gotten to the second half of the chapter!!!! ARRRGU BLARGH BLARGH BLARGH!

What do you think a NaNoWriMo entry by Somber would look like?

by Stringtheory Thu Nov 07, 2013 7:40 pm

OneMoreDaySK wrote:
Somber wrote:... I am SUCH a fucking failwriter. I am looking at 29 pages. 17k words... and they're covering ALL OF HALF A FRIGGING HOUR! That's almost a minute per page... and I haven't even gotten to the second half of the chapter!!!! ARRRGU BLARGH BLARGH BLARGH!
What do you think a NaNoWriMo entry by Somber would look like?

He'd meet the 50,000 word count within two weeks, and go over by at least twice the number of words by time the month was over. The finished story would be awesome, but he'd think it was terrible. Or he'd be still writing it a year later and think it's still terrible.

by Scienza Thu Nov 07, 2013 7:54 pm

Somber wrote:... I am SUCH a fucking failwriter. I am looking at 29 pages. 17k words... and they're covering ALL OF HALF A FRIGGING HOUR! That's almost a minute per page... and I haven't even gotten to the second half of the chapter!!!! ARRRGU BLARGH BLARGH BLARGH!

This song effectively cheers me up, mayhaps it will do the same for you.

by SilentCarto Thu Nov 07, 2013 8:01 pm

Somber wrote:... I am SUCH a fucking failwriter. I am looking at 29 pages. 17k words... and they're covering ALL OF HALF A FRIGGING HOUR! That's almost a minute per page... and I haven't even gotten to the second half of the chapter!!!! ARRRGU BLARGH BLARGH BLARGH!

I'm really sorry to laugh, but that final descent into gibberish... Spike

*cough*
Seriously, though -- I've read whole chapters of actual published books that covered like five minutes. It's not a horrible thing, it just means there's a lot going on. (Especially if some of it involves Dawn in her turbo mode...) I'm sure I don't have to tell you that action in books tends to be fifteen minutes of focused activity followed by a paragraph or two narrating the next three hours. It is what it is, man, and as long as you feel that what you're writing is entertaining, it's no big deal. We don't read with stopwatches on.

by Caoimhe Thu Nov 07, 2013 8:43 pm

I think the amount of time and pages makes perfect sense for BJ's brain, honestly!

by WavemasterRyx Thu Nov 07, 2013 8:59 pm

Somber wrote:... I am SUCH a fucking failwriter. I am looking at 29 pages. 17k words... and they're covering ALL OF HALF A FRIGGING HOUR! That's almost a minute per page... and I haven't even gotten to the second half of the chapter!!!! ARRRGU BLARGH BLARGH BLARGH!

*hugs very gently* it'll be okay, Somber, write as much as you need to.

O. Hinds wrote:
Regarding BAON:
To anyone who's completely baffled by this post: WavemasterRyx wrote a short AU (very AU) fic about Blackjack and Glory going to pick flowers. Link.

I’m glad it didn’t offend you too much. Don’t worry at all about not having time to say more, I appreciate that you even read it in the first place. Also, boot to the head.

by Guest Thu Nov 07, 2013 9:01 pm

I wouldn't say that hyperclose slowed-down writing is necessarily a good thing, but it's certainly not a bad one.

by O. Hinds Thu Nov 07, 2013 9:11 pm

WavemasterRyx wrote:
O. Hinds wrote:
Regarding BAON:
To anyone who's completely baffled by this post: WavemasterRyx wrote a short AU (very AU) fic about Blackjack and Glory going to pick flowers. Link.
I’m glad it didn’t offend you too much. Don’t worry at all about not having time to say more, I appreciate that you even read it in the first place. Also, boot to the head.

...Offend... Eh? How would it have offended me?

:)
(Oh, and I'm still curious who that mare referred to by cutie mark was.)

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