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Post by Icy Shake on Fri Jul 24, 2015 11:08 am


Welcome to the Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion Thread!
This is the place to discuss Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons, a Fallout/MLP:FiM crossover fic by Somber. Story discussion is on the left, group therapy to the right. Please try to schedule your emotional breakdowns when they don't conflict with anyone else's.

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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion

Post by swicked on Fri Jul 24, 2015 12:39 pm

Icy Shake wrote:I wasn't considering Lacunae too much, due to the differences in circumstances and who they were, even if Psalm was a large part of her.
I'm pretty sure Psalm still has all of Lacunae's memories even though she isn't the amalgam that Lacunae was. It was her brain and those experiences wouldn't be lost with the thoughts and feelings others had placed in her.
So Lacunae is a part of what Psalm is now, too.

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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion

Post by Icy Shake on Fri Jul 24, 2015 2:40 pm

swicked wrote:
Icy Shake wrote:I wasn't considering Lacunae too much, due to the differences in circumstances and who they were, even if Psalm was a large part of her.
I'm pretty sure Psalm still has all of Lacunae's memories even though she isn't the amalgam that Lacunae was. It was her brain and those experiences wouldn't be lost with the thoughts and feelings others had placed in her.
So Lacunae is a part of what Psalm is now, too.
Yes, of course. I just meant that although Psalm retains those memories, Lacunae's actions, made as they were by a different but related person and under the external influence of the Goddess, are not necessarily very informative to what Psalm would have done, or wished to do.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion

Post by SilentCarto on Fri Jul 24, 2015 7:44 pm

Icy Shake wrote:Again, I have some mixed feelings there. The memories and narrative certainly have a bigger gap for Blackjack, but along other axes I think we can infer that she was actually much closer than Cogs, based on things like the choice Luna's soul made during their confrontation and the more comprehensive transformation.
I don't understand what you mean. Cogs was effectively Nightmare Moon Mark II. Not that she wanted to put out the sun or anything, but it's Luna's own worst impulses unbound by... well, sanity. She's been a monster before, so we know that's a part of her psyche.

The transformation is interesting, but I wouldn't ascribe it to a "better-fitting mind". Luna was skilled at shapeshifting, so explanations could range from fulfilling some subconscious desire of BJ's to her soul having more power available now that it's longer conflicted between "I'm a monster" and "that's wrong".

Icy Shake wrote:Difficulty there is that having that be an aspect of Psalm's soul that is getting in the way strikes me as troublesome, since it's either very new, and thus I'd question associating it with her soul, or has always been present but for most of her experience kept her from playing her part to serve Luna and fight for Equestria.
Well, Psalm always hated killing. Shooting Big Mac broke her, and she took refuge in being a monster -- as she explained in this chapter, striving for a redemption she knew would never come.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion

Post by O. Hinds on Sun Jul 26, 2015 5:01 am

Icy Shake, sorry, but I've got another thing for you to look for. We appear to have over sixty uses of "EFS" vs. over one hundred and twenty uses of "E.F.S."
Thank you again and as usual for doing this sort of thing for us.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion

Post by Harmony Ltd. on Sun Jul 26, 2015 7:57 am

Unrelated to anything to anything, but I was thinking...

Given all the mind, soul and body fuckery Blackjack went through in the course of the story, I'm surprised there hasn't been such an exchange in PH already.

Well, unless you count the soul-meld scene with Luna. Or Happyhorn. But that's not quite the same thing, now, isn't it?
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion

Post by Harmony Ltd. on Sun Jul 26, 2015 7:45 pm

@wavemasterryx:

How to make your own Fancy Lads Snack Cake

(tried to tag it you so you would see it through the boo-project-horizons tumblr, but I wasn't sure you'd see it and your askbox is closed)
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion

Post by WavemasterRyx on Mon Jul 27, 2015 2:21 am

Harmony Ltd. wrote:@wavemasterryx:

How to make your own Fancy Lads Snack Cake

(tried to tag it you so you would see it through the boo-project-horizons tumblr, but I wasn't sure you'd see it and your askbox is closed)
Ah... long story short, it "shouldn't" be closed, but tumblr "is being tumblr" again...  Thank you for letting me know so I can try to fix it, or just make a post to let other people know...

And thank you for letting me know about the cakes too, it would be fun to try making them.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion

Post by O. Hinds on Mon Jul 27, 2015 3:39 am

Oh, actually, Icy Shake, regarding the E.F.S./EFS thing, you probably don't need to find every occurrence, just the chapter numbers. It would be easy to turn ever EFS in a chapter into an E.F.S. with an automated find and replace, and then I could run a second search for "E.F.S.." to take care of the extra periods left in sentence-ending usages. So that's (hopefully; I don't know your exact method) a bit less work for you!
(Sorry I didn't think of this earlier, if you've already done a lot of it.)
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion

Post by Derpmind on Mon Jul 27, 2015 8:58 am

hawkeye92 wrote:Well, it's been a very long time- years probably. I haven't stopped reading and I am still looking forwards to the resolution. However, there's a one big niggling thing about this final part of the story that's bugged me pretty badly.
 
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*Snip*
 
It shouldn't really be taken as discouragement, it's intended as constructive criticism, even if the issue is more or less impossible to fix. I suppose it's more a recommendation for other people planning on writing a story, not to fall into that trap.

I agree with much of what you said here. I've been commenting even less often than I normally do for the most recent chapters, and I think this is why. I really do still enjoy reading a new chapter of Project Horizons more than any other story. (And I can't believe that's still true after all this time.) But the most recent chapters just ask for too much emotion from me.

(Digression: I think the general limit for too much emotion might be much lower than the limit for too much scenery porn, or explosions, or hard decision thinking times, or character interaction dialogue stuff, or pretty much everything and anything else. What's up with emotions in stories anyways? Eh, brb a bunch of hours.)

I've only made 9 posts this entire year. How's that for depressing? How
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion

Post by O. Hinds on Mon Jul 27, 2015 2:07 pm

Sorry, Derpmind.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion

Post by Icy Shake on Mon Jul 27, 2015 7:08 pm

Sorry for the delay. I'll have something later tonight, tomorrow at the latest. It's in a lot of chapters, and I'm considering making a script to follow that would cover that and some other things (which together with the EFS issue, mean something for almost all chapters), and a few spot changes that would mess up the script.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion

Post by O. Hinds on Mon Jul 27, 2015 7:10 pm

No problem. Thanks for doing all of this.
Will this pass just be for the EFS issue and those few other things, or would it be all of that in addition to a normal error spotting/chapter commentary post or post group?
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion

Post by Icy Shake on Mon Jul 27, 2015 7:21 pm

I'd just be dumping what I have as part of a separate post, which will also include a retread of 18 I've been sitting on since late last week and some miscellaneous other fixes.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion

Post by O. Hinds on Mon Jul 27, 2015 7:40 pm

Ah. A long work session for me too then, probably. Well, it has to be done. Thanks!
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Post by Icy Shake on Tue Jul 28, 2015 2:56 am

Right, here we go. I've tried to group things nicely, but since so many pages are involved, it might be better to just go in batches . . . I don't know.
Basically normal editing:
1:
ot that she was a bad mom, just…. Ugh!

should have extra space after ellipsis or not capitalize "Ugh"


10:
Perk added: Intense Training- Your experiences travelling in the Wasteland have allowed you to add one to your intelligence.

should have space after "Training"


18:
security meant walking two hours patrol through the living quarters,

"hours' patrol"


seeming to be pondering something. “If you want to fucking know

only one space after period


“The Stable Dweller,” I added, “She’s incredible… what she’s done.”

suggest making the comma after "added" a period


Why, the head of the Security Mare of course!

comma after "Mare"?


plates that was the utter ruin of my barding. Glory must have used

only one space after period


and I could feel the scissors snipping at my… I smacked my forehead into the wall as the

I think there should be another space after the ellipsis. seems like a separate sentence


Then it looked at my horn and screamed, “Liar!”, then lunged for my face.

this is an awkward case, but I don't think there should be a comma after the quotation


“Let me out!”  Glory screamed at the top of her lungs from the depths of the oven.

should probably have only one space after quotation


as she fought to hide a smile. Then it faded

only one space after period


Are you happy?!” He screamed in her face

"He" shouldn't be capitalized or there should be a second space after quotation


ghoul foals told the pink unicorn. “Our parents are

only one space after period


Ghoulfriend-- 10% more damage to ghoul targets and an opportunity for additional speech options.

should have symmetrical spacing around dash


19:
“Please Goldie… please don’t let them get hurt….”

comma after first "Please"


New Perk added: Dealer’s Ante: Every time you kill

second colon should be dash – with spaces around it


20:
New Perk added: Ferocious Loyalty: When you drop below 50

second colon should be dash – with spaces around it


21:
Either way you never set off landmines or floor based traps.

comma after "way"


22:
Vaguely, I could make out a mare saying, ‘Please…Trixie…’

I think those should maybe be double quotes, maybe space after ellipsis since different words?


I checked my E.F.S.... Three red bars

should have second space after ellipsis


Perk added: Intensive Training - Your recent experiences in have granted you a +1 to your endurance.

need object of the preposition "in" (where? "the Wasteland"?), or "in" should be deleted


27:
I asked as we flew by a particularly... solid looking?--cloud.

double hyphen should probably just be ellipsis


33:
“Now… let us get the children to the airship–-“

inverted quotation mark, delete hyphen (-, second), but I suggest you check if -" works to find/replace it (-" finds -“ to replace with -”). I think it should based on using GDocs in view only, but if so, it will cut down on what would be searched for later (don't need -“, -”, –“, –”, or the start of quotation equivalents, just -" and –")


for the quickest care anywh–-whoa!”

delete hyphen (-, second)



38:
“Ooooo…. Shit!” I yelled as I fell

should have second space after ellipsis or not capitalize "Shit"


Easy as pie…. See?

should have second space after ellipsis


40:
The core of Hoofington was arranged in three vague circles stacked one atop the other and running north and south.

"core" should be capitalized


49:
Shhh…. Don’t worry about that now.

should have second space after ellipsis


71:
levitate up the Ironpony — I needed a damned name for the thing!  All badass guns had special names! — and give Glory some

replace em-dashes with en-dashes –
Now, footnote specific editing:

I've tried to group things so, where applicable, you won't need to clear your clipboard

big string of hyphens (over 4 ----) -> nice line separator thing: everything up to 38


assuming "Level Up." and "Maximum Level Reached." Also, the footnotes shouldn't be indented, and they should either consistently have spaces between the notes (footnote, skill note, perks) or not.

Cases where indented but otherwise fine:
3, 9, 31, 44, 45, 46, 48, 49, 50, 51, 52, 66,

10, 11, 12, 13, 16, 18, 22, 24:
Footnote: Level up

period needed, "up" should be capitalized


14:
Footnote: Level Up!

exclamation point should be period

15:
Footnotes: Level up!

"Footnote", "up" should be capitalized, exclamation point should be period


19, 20, 21, 23, 25, 26, 27, 30, 34:
Footnote: Level up!

"up" should be capitalized, exclamation point should be period


28:
Footnote: 50% to next level.

delete "next" (29 and 31 don't have it)


29:
Footnote: 75% to level

should have period


34, 37, 38, 43:
Maximum level reached.

"level" and "reached" should be capitalized


35:
Footnote: Max level reached.

"Maximum" not "Max", "level" and "reached" should be capitalized


36:
Footnote: Maximum level reached

"level" and "reached" should be capitalized, period needed


39, 40, 41, 42, 47:
Footnote: Maximum level reached!

"level" and "reached" should be capitalized, exclamation point should be period
And the other find/replace stuff:
EFS... -> E.F.S.… (3 dots to dot-ellipsis): 54

EFS… -> E.F.S.… (ellipsis to dot-ellipsis): 61

E.F.S…. -> E.F.S.… (ellipsis-dot to dot-ellipsis): 11

E.F.S.... -> E.F.S.… (4 dots to dot-ellipsis): 22

EFS -> E.F.S.…: 1, 6, 7, 8, 17, 24, 26, 29, 30, 31, 33, 36, 38, 43, 45, 46, 51, 52, 53, 54, 55, 56, 59, 60, 61, 62.1, 62.2, 63, 64, 68, 72, 73, 74

.... -> … (4 dots to ellipsis): 19, 26, 27, 28, 29, 34, 35, 41, 43, 45, 46, 47, 48, 54, 62.2, 63, 65, 67, 69, 70, 72, 74, 76

…. -> … (ellipsis-dot to ellipsis): 1, 6, 14, 15, 17, 19, 21, 22, 24, 26, 27, 28, 29, 30, 31, 32, 35, 37, 38, 39, 40, 44, 47, 49, 50, 53, 59, 66, 67, 68,

big string of hyphens (over 4 ----) -> nice line thing: everything up to 38

--- -> – (triple hyphen to en-dash): hub page quote for chapter 36


past here is pretty much adding things ignored before, but with a find/replace system and most chapters already open, there's less start-up cost, still, basically optional now though probably will be done if a printed book set is made:



-- -> – (double hyphen to en-dash): pretty much every chapter
... -> … (triple tot to ellipsis character): pretty much every chapter

hard to say with these, because most would be fixed by the above -- -> – conversion
-" -> –” (it looks to me like this should actually cover all three directions, based on how GDocs has worked for me so far)
-“ -> –”
-” -> –” hub quote for ch 50
–" -> –” (likewise here)
–“ -> –”

" - " (space-hyphen-space) -> " – " (space-en dash-space): hub, 1-9, 11-14, 16, 22, 23, 39, 47,

"travell" -> "travel": 1, 2, 8, 10, 12, 13, 14, 15, 17, 18, 19, 20, 23, 27, 30, 31, 33, 38, 44, 46, 48, 49, 51, 52, 54, 56, 58, 59, 60, 63, 64, 65, 67, 68, 69, 70, 71, 72, 73, 76
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion

Post by O. Hinds on Tue Jul 28, 2015 7:55 am

@Icy Shake:
Ah, thank you very much as always.

Icy Shake wrote:but I suggest you check if -" works to find/replace it (-" finds -“ to replace with -”). I think it should based on using GDocs in view only, but if so, it will cut down on what would be searched for later (don't need -“, -”, –“, –”, or the start of quotation equivalents, just -" and –")
Sorry; I don't know how I'd go about doing that. Maybe paste copy and paste directional quotation marks from the chapter into the search box? None of us actually know how those work, I think; I just delete the old ones, put new ones in, and hope. It seems to work. Dashes are even worse; Bronode's the only one who seems to be able to do them, and he doesn't know why his computer does it. Whenever I actually want to put one in a chapter, instead of just using a double hyphen or waiting for Bronode, I find another dash somewhere and copy it.

Icy Shake wrote:I've tried to group things so, where applicable, you won't need to clear your clipboard
Thanks.

Icy Shake wrote:and they should either consistently have spaces between the notes (footnote, skill note, perks) or not.
Do you have a list of the chapters that still don't have such spaces? Sorry.

There's the footnote specific editing done (barring the above). Hopefully I didn't skip over anything. I don't think I did, though.

Icy Shake wrote:EFS… -> E.F.S.… (ellipsis to dot-ellipsis): 61
This does not actually appear to be in 61. I did find one in 62.1, though.

Icy Shake wrote:EFS -> E.F.S.…
I assume you meant "EFS -> E.F.S." (or "EFS. -> E.F.S." at the end of a period-terminated sentence) here? That's what I'm working with.

Icy Shake wrote:.... -> … (4 dots to ellipsis)
I didn't find this in 74, but I did find it in 75.1.

Icy Shake wrote:big string of hyphens (over 4 ----) -> nice line thing: everything up to 38
You listed that before, in the footnote specific editing section.

Icy Shake wrote:past here is pretty much adding things ignored before, but with a find/replace system and most chapters already open, there's less start-up cost, still, basically optional now though probably will be done if a printed book set is made:
Thank you for finding these, but thank you also for saying that they're optional; I think that I will indeed opt out of doing them now. As for the possibility of a printed book, well, we can deal with that when and if it arises.

Anyway, whew! That did indeed take a while, and yeah, appears to have affected most of the chapters. Thank you again very much for finding this stuff.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion

Post by ILM126 on Tue Jul 28, 2015 10:01 am

Hey guys, how's it been going?

Just a quick thing here, I've used Project Horizons as part of my English Assignment. And while skimming some parts of the story, I've found a bit that I'm quite unsure of.

Ch49:


Then I was struck by that emerald lightning again and felt myself torn by its foul magics.  This was malicious hate; no reason or purpose.  Simply inflicting pain for the sake of inflicting it and nothing more.  The motes swirled wildly, and by the time the agony faded, I was left feeling as if I’d been raped and violated all over again.  The lightning hurt me on a fundamental level I’d never imagined before, and yet I couldn’t die again.  I could only scream.  And this time there was no Scotch needing protecting to give me strength; there was only the hope that eventually Snails would be able to get me out of here.

I’d lost contact with Snips with that last attack, and no matter how I tried to call out, I couldn’t get past that terrible scream.  The few motes I did bump into were sobbing, raging, or worst of all… resigned.  To keep myself from going mad, I tried to move, but in this place space seemed… uncertain.  I felt like I was moving, but no matter which direction I took, I was travelling back inside.  The very center of the sea had a hollow; if there was something here devouring souls, then I at least wanted a good look at it.

The closer to the center I moved, the more frequent and terrible that lightning became, but I started to suspect it wasn’t as if this place was singling me out.  I was just getting caught by stray fire.  Whatever the lightning was targeting lay right in the middle of this sea.  Slowly, the motes thinned out more and more until…

No…

It couldn’t be!

A dozen bolts of lightning struck the center, and for the first time I realized that the scream Lacunae had been hearing hadn’t been a what.  It was a who.

A moment later, there was a hooking sensation, and I felt myself being pulled away.  I didn’t fight it.  I couldn’t think at all.  If I’d had eyes I would have wept; a mouth, and I would have cried out.  Instead, I simply shut down and let myself be dragged away.

My comments:
I'm not sure if that the who Blackjack is referring to has been mentioned yet. When I first read it, I thought it was Princess Luna. But I'm now not so sure who it is after her encounter with Cognitium in the Core. Or it could be just some pony/creature that'll appear in the last chapter! :D

Still, Morning Glory ;~;
I have a bad feeling about her soul O>O!
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion

Post by ILM126 on Tue Jul 28, 2015 10:04 am

Ch49:
She glanced at Snails and gave a little smile.  “Well.  I’m still around.  And so were Snips and Snails.  And Twist is kinda around, so we thought we were going to, like, look around and see if Diamond Tiara’s still around too!  Not… crazy looking around.  Really looking.”  The unicorn stallion rolled his eyes a little, but then she looked up at him with a sympathetic smile, and said, “Snails wants to find some unicorn mare he knew back before the war.”

Mercy  And that part as well... Damn, going back to read old stuff hurts the heart :|
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion

Post by SilentCarto on Tue Jul 28, 2015 7:34 pm

ILM126 wrote:I'm not sure if that the who Blackjack is referring to has been mentioned yet. When I first read it, I thought it was Princess Luna. But I'm now not so sure who it is after her encounter with Cognitium in the Core. Or it could be just some pony/creature that'll appear in the last chapter! :D
I'm absolutely positive it was Luna's soul. The green lightning was flashing in to strike at the person in the center, and when Cogs brought BJ to the center of the Tokomare, her Harbinger mages were zapping Luna's soul with green lightning in the middle of a swarm of motes to keep it contained.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion

Post by Icy Shake on Tue Jul 28, 2015 9:22 pm

O. Hinds wrote:
Icy Shake wrote:but I suggest you check if -" works to find/replace it (-" finds -“ to replace with -”). I think it should based on using GDocs in view only, but if so, it will cut down on what would be searched for later (don't need -“, -”, –“, –”, or the start of quotation equivalents, just -" and –")
Sorry; I don't know how I'd go about doing that.  Maybe paste copy and paste directional quotation marks from the chapter into the search box?  None of us actually know how those work, I think; I just delete the old ones, put new ones in, and hope.  It seems to work.  Dashes are even worse; Bronode's the only one who seems to be able to do them, and he doesn't know why his computer does it.  Whenever I actually want to put one in a chapter, instead of just using a double hyphen or waiting for Bronode, I find another dash somewhere and copy it.
Yes, copying in is about the only way I've figured out, but there may be key combinations that work. The way I've tended to deal with it is having a menu of characters I tend to use in a text editor—dashes, quotation marks, others. Got a fair amount of use out of é at my last job, where it was useful in differentiating between "cache" and "Caché," the programming language.

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Icy Shake wrote:and they should either consistently have spaces between the notes (footnote, skill note, perks) or not.
Do you have a list of the chapters that still don't have such spaces?  Sorry.
All of the ones I'd have identified last night now look fine.

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Icy Shake wrote:EFS -> E.F.S.…
I assume you meant "EFS -> E.F.S." (or "EFS. -> E.F.S." at the end of a period-terminated sentence) here?  That's what I'm working with.
Yes, that is correct.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion

Post by O. Hinds on Tue Jul 28, 2015 10:55 pm

Icy Shake wrote:Yes, copying in is about the only way I've figured out, but there may be key combinations that work. The way I've tended to deal with it is having a menu of characters I tend to use in a text editor—dashes, quotation marks, others. Got a fair amount of use out of é at my last job, where it was useful in differentiating between "cache" and "Caché," the programming language.
I've got something like that for the line at the end of chapters, though I've not made a broader document of the sort you describe.

Icy Shake wrote:All of the ones I'd have identified last night now look fine.
Icy Shake wrote:Yes, that is correct.
Thanks!
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Post by O. Hinds on Tue Jul 28, 2015 10:59 pm

ILM126 wrote:Just a quick thing here, I've used Project Horizons as part of my English Assignment.
Oh, neat! Any details you can and care to tell us?
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Post by ILM126 on Wed Jul 29, 2015 5:26 am

Yeah, I just handed it up today. Here's the GoogleDoc link, it looks totally different because Google just doesn't format all my fonts...

I couldn't get all of the timeline of Project Horizons down, but I did what I can with the time left ^^"
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Post by O. Hinds on Wed Jul 29, 2015 6:53 am

...I wonder what your teacher will make of that. :)

(Oh, and trivia: I think I recall Blackjack's age coming up once in an out-of-story conversation as 21, but that may be inaccurate or out of date.)
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Post by ILM126 on Wed Jul 29, 2015 7:29 am

O. Hinds wrote:...I wonder what your teacher will make of that.  :)

(Oh, and trivia: I think I recall Blackjack's age coming up once in an out-of-story conversation as 21, but that may be inaccurate or out of date.)

Hmmmm, I'll just go with your estimate. But I'll raise it to 22. Gilda
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Post by O. Hinds on Wed Jul 29, 2015 8:06 am

Ah, sorry, it seems I've been unclear; that's not an estimate of mine (unless I am misremembering the conversation even more than I previously thought within the realm of plausibility).
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Post by ILM126 on Thu Jul 30, 2015 7:34 am

Also, someone did a review on Chapter 76. Wow... Wish I could do that :P

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Hf30Az5Y2oY
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Post by O. Hinds on Thu Jul 30, 2015 7:47 am

...I was going to watch it now, and then I saw the duration.  :)
Still, thanks for linking it.  I'll watch at least a bit, I think.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion

Post by Icy Shake on Thu Jul 30, 2015 10:31 am

Yikes, that's long. Well, might check out the audio this weekend, I do have a few hours of driving to do.

Over on Reddit Somber once said he saw Blackjack as 17, but I don't think anything to tack down her age with precision was ever put in the story. And he could have changed his mind since then.
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