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A three day night (Fan fic WIP)

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A three day night (Fan fic WIP)

Post by Nightfire on Sat Sep 08, 2012 2:53 am

Thanks to Moony for being my lovely editor to my shit writing skills XD anyways chapter one is in progress.
Prologue:
Spoiler:
I remember the day I met that cute, sweet stallion. It was forty-three years ago, the sun was shining, and ponies were out enjoying their day… However, that day felt different, like the day I lost my mother and father. They were a lovely couple, hard workers, and they knew everypony that came by to say “hi” at their store; they worked in a nice little décor place making ponies’ homes nice, until one day a stallion that reeked of trouble walked into the store. I can never forget that day, sitting in my mother's lap as I watched the stallion come to the counter only a few feet away from us. He said few words that my mind can’t process, due to my age at time. The scared look on my dad’s face is one I'll never forget, as the stallion drew a knife on him then started stabbing him repeatedly… My mother was in shock seeing the dark pool of blood pour from my father, and from his body laying lifeless on the old wooden floor. The stallion approached me and my mom slowly, and then he killed her too.

Now I’m straying far from the story I’m about to tell… Now, where was I?... Oh, right! The young, cute stallion I was talking about. Well before I start with that let me say something of myself. My name is Leah, and I work hard as a volunteer at a hospital and I'm nineteen years old. Now then, the stallion, and how I met him...
It all started one afternoon, when I was taking a little break in the park…


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Re: A three day night (Fan fic WIP)

Post by Flying Ace: Comet on Sat Sep 08, 2012 5:03 am

" sitting in my mothers lap" It should be "sitting in my mother's lap"
~Comet <3
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Re: A three day night (Fan fic WIP)

Post by Nightfire on Sat Sep 08, 2012 10:07 am

Flying Ace: Comet wrote:" sitting in my mothers lap" It should be "sitting in my mother's lap"
~Comet <3
To be honest it doesn't matter however it was fixed.
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