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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Frost Fri Aug 09, 2013 8:57 am
@Swicked: I might be able to come up with something for that last one. The others don't really work for me.
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Frost Fri Aug 09, 2013 11:08 am
Although Ronin are cool, and Paladins are also cool. I might try that for my next blurb. I need to make something that's not gray and depressing, anyway.
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Harmony Ltd. Fri Aug 09, 2013 11:24 am
Oh Boy.Mister Frost wrote:I need to make something that's not gray and depressing, anyway.
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Frost Fri Aug 09, 2013 11:33 am
John's a dog, ain't he?Harmony Ltd. wrote:Oh Boy.Mister Frost wrote:I need to make something that's not gray and depressing, anyway.
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by Harmony Ltd. Fri Aug 09, 2013 11:36 am
John's what you want John to be.
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Frost Fri Aug 09, 2013 11:38 am
Well a solid 7/10 parents don't crush children in boxes after a tragic death, so......
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Harmony Ltd. Fri Aug 09, 2013 11:43 am
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- In my mind John was a robot, but it's interesting to see other people's point of view.
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Frost Fri Aug 09, 2013 11:49 am
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- John is now a robot dog. This is canon, and you have no choice in the matter.
Regardless, I really do have a (probably dumb-ass) idea for that New Holy War thing, I'm just currently wondering how to fit the backstory into the blurb proper without completely breaking the narrative flow for an info-dump
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Harmony Ltd. Fri Aug 09, 2013 11:55 am
A thing that's often done in sci-fi short stories is to just use the technical terms and in-universe history references "as a matter of fact", "assuming" the reader knows what is being talked about. Read some Asimov short stories to understand what I'm talking about.
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Frost Fri Aug 09, 2013 12:08 pm
That's quite a good idea. Think I'll give it a shot when I'm back in a writing-conducive environment (as opposed to my damn phone)
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Meleagridis Fri Aug 09, 2013 1:11 pm
I'm always a little hesitant to do things with only dialogue, but sometimes I really don't want to spare any focus on anything other than the words...swicked wrote:
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Thing
As I was reading, I was trying very hard to identify the speaker, toddling between a dog or a mentally challenged family member.Harmony Ltd. wrote:Oh Boy.Mister Frost wrote:I need to make something that's not gray and depressing, anyway.
Either one made the box bit crushing (no pun intended, for once).
- On that subject:
- Does anybody know if we can actually make artificial intelligences capable of liking things yet?
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Frost Fri Aug 09, 2013 1:22 pm
Decent. I like the mystery that gets involved with stylistic choices like all-dialogue.Meleagridis wrote:I'm always a little hesitant to do things with only dialogue, but sometimes I really don't want to spare any focus on anything other than the words...swicked wrote:
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Thing
Unfortunately, the Bottom-Dweller's lines tended a tad on the cheesy side, while the Top-Dweller was almost annoyingly a "blank slate" character
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Meleagridis Fri Aug 09, 2013 1:29 pm
Then I'll pull a cheese transfusion next time, put some life and maybe multiple sentences into Topsy. I find that boring characters with no lines are an easy fix. Not so easy for excessive cheesiness, though. I don't have quick fixes for that. Thanks for the heads up.Mister Frost wrote:
Unfortunately, the Bottom-Dweller's lines tended a tad on the cheesy side, while the Top-Dweller was almost annoyingly a "blank slate" character
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Harmony Ltd. Fri Aug 09, 2013 1:40 pm
Interesting. It's probably because I'm the one who wrote the thing, but the nature of the speaker was semi-obvious to me.Meleagridis wrote:As I was reading, I was trying very hard to identify the speaker, toddling between a dog or a mentally challenged family member.
Either one made the box bit crushing (no pun intended, for once).
Care to elaborate
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- what made you think it could be a kid and why garbage men would just roll with having a kid in the compactor ?
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Meleagridis Fri Aug 09, 2013 1:45 pm
I never thought it was a kid. I was getting the vibe of someone fully grown, but not at the mental development level of a human adult. They were connected to the family in some way, but not as close as an actual child.
When the end came around, I just wasn't entirely sure what to believe. I figured that, since they were clearly not on the same level as a thinking adult, maybe they were interpreting things differently.
When the end came around, I just wasn't entirely sure what to believe. I figured that, since they were clearly not on the same level as a thinking adult, maybe they were interpreting things differently.
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- I thought it might have been how a dog would be viewing lethal injection. Everything getting smaller just being a way of describing the poison's effects.
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Harmony Ltd. Sat Aug 10, 2013 8:04 pm
Possible inspiration :
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Both shots are from this album : http://www.spiegel.de/fotostrecke/photo-gallery-derelict-detroit-fotostrecke-63754.html
2013-08-11-HARM-1/
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2013-08-11-HARM-2/
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Both shots are from this album : http://www.spiegel.de/fotostrecke/photo-gallery-derelict-detroit-fotostrecke-63754.html
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Frost Sat Aug 10, 2013 8:55 pm
Between those two and our conversation about the New Holy War yesterday, I've got an almost-not-shit idea brewing. If only I could stay off Darksiders 2 long enough to play it
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by StoneSlinger88 Sat Aug 10, 2013 9:56 pm
I've got a prompt for anyone who wants one. Source: "Fall of the Peacemakers".
"The hush of the crowd as the horse rode by -
The black lace veil hid her tears from my eyes..."
"The hush of the crowd as the horse rode by -
The black lace veil hid her tears from my eyes..."
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Frost Sat Aug 10, 2013 10:16 pm
There a particular reason absolutely none of that dialogue is in quotes? Because if it's not a conversation toward the end, it certainly seems like one.swicked wrote:I think I'm going to have to warm up to these writing drills. I don't often write prose, and never have as a result of other people's prompts. I mean, my creative writing classes in high school would offer stylistic stuff like "Write a story in second person.", but never anything that would actually test anyone. It was not that good of a school.Harmony Ltd. wrote:2013-08-09-HARM-8/
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Still, I wrote something for this. Also something for Last's bleeding woman picture, but it's a poem, so I still need to convert it to prose.
I really, really need to re-learn how to write creatively, I guess...
- I also don't know how to use gdocs:
Okay, so, what have we got so far?
Um, let’s see... okay, we want exactly twenty million dollars each. Dollars being from the entirely endorsed currency of the government of the United States of America, of the planet Earth we currently reside in, in this Universe, in currency of styles and mint dates that correspond perfectly with those printed in the last ten years, yeah? Non-sequential serial numbers, but not in any particular order, either. Just various random numbers, but VALID ones. We don’t want them stolen from anyone else, we need them to be created from nothing but not have duplicates in existence or potentially being made in the future. We need no one to notice these numbers are missing, though, and particularly no way for it to be traced to us. Um... what else...
Did you say that our getting this money can’t be the result of someone else losing it?
Yeah.
Nor from someone getting hurt?
Oh, no, that’s a good one. That too.
Ugh, are you guys finished, yet?
No, we gotta double-check this some more.
Why can’t you just wish for the next lottery ticket numbers or something?
Because then you, or someone else, could change the future and we wouldn’t know the difference. It’s not set in stone. Besides, the person who would otherwise win it wouldn’t if we did that.
Okay, well, what if you wished you’d won last week, then?
What, and create a paradox? ‘Oh sure, I already won, why should I wish I won?’ No, we’re doing it this way.
You guys aren’t any fun. How’s an dijin supposed to keep itself entertained when humans aren’t as stupid as they are greedy? I’m getting out of here.
...uh, no, you’re not. We haven’t made our wish, yet.
And where does it say I have to grant a wish at all?
...um...
Seriously, how else am I supposed to keep myself entertained if not by ruining the lives of you mortals?
...by not being a dick?
Ugh, you sound like my mother.
...
...huh. Well, there he goes. How very unforeseen and... consequential.
Indeed.
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Frost Sat Aug 10, 2013 10:56 pm
Aside from that, though, I liked it. It was somewhat amusing that they went through all the trouble dealing with a creature that may or may not have even been the "fuck people over for fun" type of genie.
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Frost Sat Aug 10, 2013 11:21 pm
I like it. I might be able to shit something outStoneSlinger88 wrote:I've got a prompt for anyone who wants one. Source: "Fall of the Peacemakers".
"The hush of the crowd as the horse rode by -
The black lace veil hid her tears from my eyes..."
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Frost Sun Aug 11, 2013 10:26 am
I'm sorry, I'm a bit confused.swicked wrote:This.Harmony Ltd. wrote:2013-08-09-HARM-4/
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This and the four horsemen from the first page, though not as they look there
Note that I stopped after the first page or so, didn't know what to do next, and picked it up again later.
In any case, I like the result well-enough, and it's a better example of my writing style than the last thing was.
We've got Red--War, obviously, and Black--Famine. We've also got Pale and Green, who are both Death (the word translated into 'pale' in Revelations describes a sickly green color, like a corpse) but no White, which is the color of Conquest or Pestilence, depending on your interpretation. I suppose that first woman was Pestilence, though.
The Horsemen also acted a fair bit like normal people. It makes setting up the comedic scene easier, but one would expect that anthropomorphic personifications of four very, very I pleasant concepts would have traces of them in their personalities.
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Frost Sun Aug 11, 2013 10:50 am
In Good Omens, the Four are not only far from normal, but practically egging on the apocalypse.
Red-War instigates wars and conflicts, and in many cases actually arms the combatants.
Black-Famine owns a food corporation whose products actually cause starvation
White-Pollution(who took over for Pestilence. As usual, Conquest is not mentioned) goes around causing oil spills and industrial accidents
Red-War instigates wars and conflicts, and in many cases actually arms the combatants.
Black-Famine owns a food corporation whose products actually cause starvation
White-Pollution(who took over for Pestilence. As usual, Conquest is not mentioned) goes around causing oil spills and industrial accidents
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Harmony Ltd. Sun Aug 11, 2013 11:19 am
Thank you.swicked wrote:Harmony Ltd. wrote:Oh Boy.Mister Frost wrote:I need to make something that's not gray and depressing, anyway.
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...other than that, due to the style of the writing, I don't really know what could be done to improve it. Good job :D
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- As for the guy's reaction... Heh. It could be that he hates robots and that his smile was a sadistic one. Or it could be that a five year old homebot isn't worth enough on the used market to warrant the trouble of putting it in the cabin and having to bear with it the whole workday until they can get to a shop to erase its memory.
or it could simply be that he sees the same thing happening at least once a week and doesn't give a shit anymore ?
Man...
2013-08-11-HARM-3/
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- The ordinary life of a garbage collector.
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Harmony Ltd. Sun Aug 11, 2013 6:13 pm
FYI,swicked wrote:Yeah, that's what they're doing with their lives, not how they acted when talking to each oth...Mister Frost wrote:In Good Omens, the Four are not only far from normal, but practically egging on the apocalypse.
Red-War instigates wars and conflicts, and in many cases actually arms the combatants.
Black-Famine owns a food corporation whose products actually cause starvation
White-Pollution(who took over for Pestilence. As usual, Conquest is not mentioned) goes around causing oil spills and industrial accidents
...nevermind, I'm not going to defend this.
I screwed up their interpretation, clearly.
I'm taking it back, now.
Edit: Please remove the story from your post, Frost.
Edit2: Thanks.
Personally, though, I still like what I wrote.
I liked it. On its own it was fine.
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Harmony Ltd. Mon Aug 12, 2013 6:34 am
2013-08-12-HARM-1/
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- "I looked into [her/his/its] eyes, and only saw myself."
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Harmony Ltd. Mon Aug 12, 2013 7:39 am
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- Any of the songs in this playlist
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Re: Writing exercise / game
by Meleagridis Mon Aug 12, 2013 7:09 pm
- Prompt:
I tried this one.swicked wrote:
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