Re: Writing exercise / game

by Frost Thu Aug 08, 2013 11:30 pm

CamoBadger wrote:
Mister Frost wrote:Finally managed to get to a place where I could read it. Pretty good, as usual from you. My main problem with it is that now I want a full-length story, and that probably won't happen.
NOPE! BAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!

Dammit, I'll work with you, just make it happen!

by Frost Thu Aug 08, 2013 11:34 pm

CamoBadger wrote:
Mister Frost wrote: This is pretty dry and mediocre, but here we go: Bad Story
I like it. It has good tension for how short it is, and has the bare bones of a universe (which I instantly headcanoned as the Mech Warrior universe because of the 'Core Worlds' thing, but I'm also insane).

Nope. Not familiar enough with the Battletech universe to make even a short blurb like that set in there. That's just a bland ol' used-future sci-fi setting

by **CamoBadger** Thu Aug 08, 2013 11:35 pm

Mister Frost wrote:
CamoBadger wrote:
Mister Frost wrote:Finally managed to get to a place where I could read it. Pretty good, as usual from you. My main problem with it is that now I want a full-length story, and that probably won't happen.
NOPE! BAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!
Dammit, I'll work with you, just make it happen!

NO! I already have 2 stories I'm working on, plus a third that people are insisting I continue from that damn writing contest Applejacks

by Frost Thu Aug 08, 2013 11:38 pm

CamoBadger wrote:
Mister Frost wrote:
CamoBadger wrote:
Mister Frost wrote:Finally managed to get to a place where I could read it. Pretty good, as usual from you. My main problem with it is that now I want a full-length story, and that probably won't happen.
NOPE! BAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!
Dammit, I'll work with you, just make it happen!
NO! I already have 2 stories I'm working on, plus a third that people are insisting I continue from that damn writing contest

I think the problem here is your excuses.

by **CamoBadger** Thu Aug 08, 2013 11:41 pm

Mister Frost wrote: I think the problem here is your excuses.

Silence you, if I ever remember it exists after getting further on the other stories, maybe I'll go back to it.

by Frost Thu Aug 08, 2013 11:45 pm

CamoBadger wrote:
Mister Frost wrote: I think the problem here is your excuses.
Silence you, if I ever remember it exists after getting further on the other stories, maybe I'll go back to it.

Don't worry. I'll pester you anytime you get anywhere close to forgetting.

by Frost Thu Aug 08, 2013 11:46 pm

Meanwhile, I need something to pass the time until I ship anyway, so I can expand on any blurbs I write if there's interest.

by Meleagridis Fri Aug 09, 2013 12:21 am

Prompt::

by Frost Fri Aug 09, 2013 12:26 am

Huh. Not sure what I can do with that, aside from having two truck drivers talk about the families they're protecting while hiding the body they ran over in their truck.

by Frost Fri Aug 09, 2013 1:13 am

Prompt?:

Spoiler:

Don't know if this works:

by Frost Fri Aug 09, 2013 1:46 am

I find you're rarely as attached to things as me. I take that as a sign of your inferiority.

Regardless, I think you raise valid points on the story. Do me next!

by Frost Fri Aug 09, 2013 1:53 am

Eh, I think feedback is a decent part of the idea. Run along, now. Dissect my shitty story.

by Frost Fri Aug 09, 2013 2:22 am

I mentioned that the room around them is "grey" because that's what it is--it's an economy-class berth on a starship, and it's pretty much just a steel room with bunks and the launch seating.

I know it seems a bit incomplete, but that, in all honesty, has as much to do with me being distracted as I wrote as it does with stylistic choice. The big status-quo change would undoubtedly happen in a longer/expanded story, but for the little blurb I wanted to focus on setting up the scene and situation (with appropriate vagueness) more than setting up a storyline

by Frost Fri Aug 09, 2013 2:30 am

I will take that into consideration. Thanks for the tip, and the read-through

by Frost Fri Aug 09, 2013 2:50 am

I think I get what you're saying.

Any of these prompts catching your eye, by the way? I wouldn't mind getting a glimpse into the writing of The Swick.

by **CamoBadger** Fri Aug 09, 2013 2:54 am

@swicked: Thanks. And yeah, getting reviews on stuff is always good, even if it's just a little blurb done for fun. Helped me out a lot in my writing class when we did exercises like this, and always will help, so thanks for that ^-^

@Frost (new prompts): The first one I think would be easiest for me, but I could work with the second one too, maybe. Not really the third one though. Now I need to decide if I should try it out tonight or if I should wait until tomorrow...

by Frost Fri Aug 09, 2013 3:16 am

@Camo: Obviously, you should do it right now. Mr. Lazypants.

@Swick: I know I, at least, am interested in reading some of your writing.

by Frost Fri Aug 09, 2013 3:31 am

Much as I'd like to assure you otherwise......yeah, getting over yourself is step one of the solution here.

by Frost Fri Aug 09, 2013 3:40 am

I tend to refer to folks who fish for complements as "Fucktards who fish for complements", so +1 respect to you.

by Frost Fri Aug 09, 2013 4:12 am

What sort of prompts might you be in the mood for, then? I might be able to whip up a couple to get your muses talking.

by Harmony Ltd. Fri Aug 09, 2013 4:34 am

Idea :

1/

Spoiler:

by Frost Fri Aug 09, 2013 5:14 am

I like the aesthetics and creative opportunities for cyberpunk-- the story possibilities opened up with the fact that many characters have information and technology literally wired into their bodies are virtually (PUN) without number. What I'm less a fan of is how aggressively anti-corporate and anti-government most cyberpunk stories are. While it's clear that they're not the most charitable of organizations, it's not like they've appointed Satan as the chief executive.

Post-Cyberpunk, I think, is the name for the stories set in cyberpunk-style worlds with more optimistic outlooks.

by Harmony Ltd. Fri Aug 09, 2013 5:27 am

The way I like to see it, "cyber"punk as a genre is "what if today's society had [technology]", the [technology] here being the "cyber" of cyberpunk. It's an exploration on the social and cultural consequences of giving today's society future technologies.

If the society has already had time to "grow-up" to completely manage the consequences of these technologies, then it's more sci-fi than cyberpunk.

Anyway, a few more ideas :

2013-08-09-HARM-1/

Spoiler:

2013-08-09-HARM-2/

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2013-08-09-HARM-3/

Spoiler:

2013-08-09-HARM-4/

Spoiler:

2013-08-09-HARM-5/

Spoiler:

by Harmony Ltd. Fri Aug 09, 2013 5:38 am

Post-cyberpunk, on the other hand, is about people living in a cyberpunk world, but instead of living at the margin of this world, they are fully part of it, and try to change it from the inside (mostly, not always).

@ Swicked : Well, here's a few ones for you, then :

2013-08-09-HARM-6/

Spoiler:

2013-08-09-HARM-7/

Spoiler:

2013-08-09-HARM-8/

Spoiler:

by Frost Fri Aug 09, 2013 5:48 am

Harmony Ltd. wrote:

2013-08-09-HARM-8/
Spoiler:

This, I can use.

by Harmony Ltd. Fri Aug 09, 2013 6:16 am

2013-08-09-HARM-9/

Spoiler:

by Frost Fri Aug 09, 2013 7:00 am

Harmony Ltd. wrote:

2013-08-09-HARM-8/
Spoiler:

Unsurprisingly also mediocre, but here y'all go: Boring

Hope you like a conversation that drags on for three pages of nothing happening.

by Harmony Ltd. Fri Aug 09, 2013 7:56 am

Not a bad exercise in narrating conversations.

Could do with a bit more polish in places :

Spoiler:

Apart from that, it's an interesting exercise in narrating a conversation - a thing that's much more dynamic than just a simple exchange of words and sentences. After all, much of the actual communication between human beings pass through non-verbal means.

by Harmony Ltd. Fri Aug 09, 2013 8:27 am

2013-08-09-HARM-10/

Spoiler:

by Frost Fri Aug 09, 2013 8:54 am

Harmony Ltd. wrote:Not a bad exercise in narrating conversations.

Could do with a bit more polish in places :

Spoiler:

Apart from that, it's an interesting exercise in narrating a conversation - a thing that's much more dynamic than just a simple exchange of words and sentences. After all, much of the actual communication between human beings pass through non-verbal means.

Thanks for the tips. I know I'm not the best with conversations, and the occasional spelling error is due to a combination of my rather high typing speed and a very sensitive keyboard.

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