Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
Bingo, I think. Chapter 16.
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- Kippershy wrote:Now I was really confused. She had explained some things, but others completely baffled me. "Wait. If that's true, why don't I remember having seen you before? I mean, a mare of your beauty? Even with how I found my entertainment and things to do during my free time, I haven't gotten to the point where I can't remember who I've been with so I don't see why I would forget such a beautiful mare like you."
With that she blushed and let out a small smile as she sniffled, looking up at me as she did.
"I was always too... nervous? No, not nervous. Shy perhaps? I suppose. I was always too shy to let you see me. You were always 'the overmare's son, my designated target to protect'. Not somepony I should've been introducing myself to."
"Why did you introduce yourself to me then?" I asked. "In the end, I mean."
Cherry blushed and pulled away a little more with that, until I pulled her face back up to mine with my hoof that was.
"It was because you spotted me before I could hide again, actually. Using my magic takes a lot of effort to go truly invisible, so I use one of my other spells that simply makes my coat and mane into the same colour and pattern as something I want to blend with... only that's no use when the backdrop is the sky and not the security wall. So yeah, I had no time to hide from you, as silly as that sounds. Then you called me beautiful and I was taken back by it all and... let myself go with the moment."
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I FUCKING LOVE YOU.
YOU HAVE NO IDEA. I DO I DO I DOOOO.
<3 I seriously love you, Ketch.
YOU HAVE NO IDEA. I DO I DO I DOOOO.
<3 I seriously love you, Ketch.
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
My fucking face when you did this for me Ketch:
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
It's no big deal. If you ever want anything else along those lines done, I could do it for you. Or at all, really. I like helping authors.
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
It just means a lot to me. I'm tired as all hell and the little things like these can really, really upset me and wind me up if I'm not 100% sure I added them in.
I was getting really worried that I had planned to, wanted to, but never done so, and my hour of searching got me nowhere.
I was getting really worried that I had planned to, wanted to, but never done so, and my hour of searching got me nowhere.
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
So, instead of working on the rewrite of chapter two... I just spent roughly two hours (5:25pm-7:35pm) writing a clop fic using Broken Bonds material (non canon) which knocked up a good 2,746 words. (2,757 according to Fimfic)
...All because the 4chan thread was saying they wanted/we need more FOE clop.
I've submitted it as a new story branch over on FF but of course, that'll take time before that goes online, if it even is accepted at first. (Which I don't see why it shouldn't be. Made sure to notch it up for what it is.)
And I know that I'm not allowed to link anyone to the G.doc publicly... but if anyone wants to see what I wrote, in all it's raw goodness, let me know.
The story is now live over on Fimfiction. While I probably shouldn't link it even still, you CAN easily find it by checking out my main story page - there'll be a link to it on the right as one of my other stories.
...All because the 4chan thread was saying they wanted/we need more FOE clop.
The story is now live over on Fimfiction. While I probably shouldn't link it even still, you CAN easily find it by checking out my main story page - there'll be a link to it on the right as one of my other stories.
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
CHAPTER TWO REWRITTEN AND NOW RELEASED
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
I shall read this chapter with the greatest of urgency!
so, prolly tonight sometime. I'm just not a very urgent person.
so, prolly tonight sometime. I'm just not a very urgent person.
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I'm just excited to finally have it done.
Wrote 8k today.
Wrote 8k today.
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Good news, with the second clopisode written and released, I won't be split between trying to write chapter 21 (and horribly failing) and finishing off the threesome scene.
So I'll be focusing on the story proper next time I write... just gotta get myself back into the habit of writing more often and how it is to write Crimson in the latest chapters.
So I'll be focusing on the story proper next time I write... just gotta get myself back into the habit of writing more often and how it is to write Crimson in the latest chapters.
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
Thanks Swicked! I'm really glad you think so.
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For you, Camo.
Bigger resolution version (4k: https://i.imgur.com/Ah3Imeo.png)
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Just read the Ch.21 teaser.
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Crimson...you're such a GIGANTIC ASS.
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By the way, productive day 'in the office' today. 5,250 words written today.
Standing at 6,128 words total and I haven't finished the current scene of Crimson's yet.
Camo:
In which way do you mean that? At least it's in character, right?
Standing at 6,128 words total and I haven't finished the current scene of Crimson's yet.
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- Yes, that's confirmation at there being a Cherry Sundae perspective this chapter.
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In which way do you mean that? At least it's in character, right?
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
Anyone able to guess what this is?
Can't decide which version I like more.
Keep in mind both are still missing some content, but yeah. Can't decide which I prefer.
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Can't decide which version I like more.
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Keep in mind both are still missing some content, but yeah. Can't decide which I prefer.
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Think I like the second one more, just because the fully opened gate looks better than the half-open one. It slightly irritates me, and I don't know why.
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So, I finally managed to get back to writing. I'm awful for this - leaving creative stuff for god knows how long because I'm feeling too shitty or hot to think I'm up to it.
I should reaaaaaaaaaally be asleep right now, but fuck it, you guys deserve me putting the extra effort in.
And I've got something for you: I'm going to make this chapter extra long to make up for how long I've not put a new one up for you.
...I mean, I'm not going to fluff it up just because, although there is a little bit of fluffing no doubt. It's just that I've wanted to go back to Cherry in this upcoming chapter and I'm already 9k in without even completing the Crimson segment yet, so unless I push back Cherry's segment for the next chapter and have it wholly be Crimson for this one, wholly Cherry with the next one...
Thoughts on the matter?
Would you rather see two chapters or one long chapter?
I should reaaaaaaaaaally be asleep right now, but fuck it, you guys deserve me putting the extra effort in.
And I've got something for you: I'm going to make this chapter extra long to make up for how long I've not put a new one up for you.
...I mean, I'm not going to fluff it up just because, although there is a little bit of fluffing no doubt. It's just that I've wanted to go back to Cherry in this upcoming chapter and I'm already 9k in without even completing the Crimson segment yet, so unless I push back Cherry's segment for the next chapter and have it wholly be Crimson for this one, wholly Cherry with the next one...
Thoughts on the matter?
Would you rather see two chapters or one long chapter?
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
Got chapter twenty one finally released. Sorry if it's horrible and sorry it doesn't have any Cherry.
Next chapter is an entirely Cherry chapter to make up for it!
I could've gone for a mega chapter, but I'm glad I didn't. Releasing a 10.8k chapter seemed a better idea and the blog responders agreed 3 - 0 on that matter.
Good news is the next chapters content is all planned because of this, meaning as long as I keep momentum and don't get lazy, it shouldn't be a hard chapter to write nor should it take too long before release.
Next chapter is an entirely Cherry chapter to make up for it!
I could've gone for a mega chapter, but I'm glad I didn't. Releasing a 10.8k chapter seemed a better idea and the blog responders agreed 3 - 0 on that matter.
Good news is the next chapters content is all planned because of this, meaning as long as I keep momentum and don't get lazy, it shouldn't be a hard chapter to write nor should it take too long before release.
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
You would.
You would release a new chapter when i'm out of town and cant read it for three days (only have phone for net)
Will read and review either sunday night or monday depending on tiredness level.
You would release a new chapter when i'm out of town and cant read it for three days (only have phone for net)
Will read and review either sunday night or monday depending on tiredness level.
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*Hugs Camo's arm*
Sorry, I didn't mean to upset you...
Sorry, I didn't mean to upset you...
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Okay, home and have an hour before dinner is done. Reading now, review will take a while because on kindle
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Okay, here we go!
- chapter 21:
They just said Hooah...
Excuse me while I decide if I need to break something or do push ups.
Also, Tsunami is now best character. No offense Rod, but you're not a medic.
Ah, I remember the bounty part from the preview. My opinion has not changed; you're a gigantic ass Crimson. Oh, wait... Crimsonlogic (by the way, my kindle has this word saved in it's vocab as a recommended word, just to let you know how much I use it)
HAAAAAAAA! The medic knows your secret, and will now hate treating you because your stupid ass wastes meds.
SF shaken up by a dead teammate doesn't surprise me, but actually freezing up in a fight because of it? Either they're new or they haven't done anything truly dangerous.
They said it again...
Crimson: high as fuck charisma and speech skill, has to quote everyone to convince ponies/zebras of anything. (Sorry, cliche alarm went off when 2 famous quotes were in the same paragraph, couldn't hold tongue)
"a single item that I do not intend to harm anyone by taking"
Says the guy who's been on a DZC hunting trip the last 3 days. Also, $20 says the DZC is using it to purify Coltchester's water supply. Enjoy your suitable Crimson >:D
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Also, I like Zimena, because stripeypone.
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CamoBadger wrote:Okay, here we go!
- chapter 21:
They just said Hooah...
Excuse me while I decide if I need to break something or do push ups.
Also, Tsunami is now best character. No offense Rod, but you're not a medic.
Ah, I remember the bounty part from the preview. My opinion has not changed; you're a gigantic ass Crimson. Oh, wait... Crimsonlogic (by the way, my kindle has this word saved in it's vocab as a recommended word, just to let you know how much I use it)
HAAAAAAAA! The medic knows your secret, and will now hate treating you because your stupid ass wastes meds.
SF shaken up by a dead teammate doesn't surprise me, but actually freezing up in a fight because of it? Either they're new or they haven't done anything truly dangerous.
They said it again...
Crimson: high as fuck charisma and speech skill, has to quote everyone to convince ponies/zebras of anything. (Sorry, cliche alarm went off when 2 famous quotes were in the same paragraph, couldn't hold tongue)
"a single item that I do not intend to harm anyone by taking"
Says the guy who's been on a DZC hunting trip the last 3 days. Also, $20 says the DZC is using it to purify Coltchester's water supply. Enjoy your suitable Crimson >:D
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- Hoo-ah because I didn't want to choose between Hoo-rah (Army) or Ooh-rah (Navy) so I though, lets just remove a letter so it isn't a direct rip but still gives the exact same idea to it and people will have no issue understanding what it's meant to mean.
Hold on one minute - the famous quote thing is actually untrue. Yes, 'the needs of the many' IS a famous quote, but as I've said before, I had never actually heard of that quote when I used it myself. I never watched that generation of Star Trek and it's my own personal feelings about those in power....what's the other famous quote though? I honestly don't remember using any famous quotes intentionally.
Never mind. I looked back at it and realised which one you meant, which is something else I personally believe in also. Though I won't lie, I had heard this one before and thought it came as a good attitude for Crimson to have.
Both of them are not for 'hurhruhurhurhruhruhnruhur letz add quotes" reasons but actually because I've thought about them (as I say, the needs of the many one is one I thought of myself and just happens to be the same as Spock's quote, so at worst, I heard it years ago and it was subconsciously remembered because I sure as hell didn't realise it was a quote until someone pointed it out) and the other quote is 'cos I thought about it and agreed with it. It works for Four Ridges and Crimson.
Right, you're sort've right with this. Echo are inexperienced, which was who Shockwave is a part of. Deadlight (zebra) is the leader of Echo, and the only fully experienced member of that unit... as you might expect, leaders of a unit have to be experienced and it's just that he got given the newbies who showed more potential than other recruits.
Alpha are all battle hardened. Freight Train, Treetop (Cherry) and Tsunami are a three pony unit that have in the past gone out and done successful missions aplenty, though the set-up would usually be Cherry on overwatch with Freight on point and Tsunami right behind him should shit go down, ready to offer immediate suppression and medical attention.
Bravo on the other hand, are a mix. Grinder, the leader, is experienced. Brick too, is experienced, but Iron Wall is the baby of the unit and hasn't seen any deaths of his side. Patrolling the walls is a pretty peaceful job and even when they're out on jobs outside of Four Ridges, his ability to endure has led to him taking a few shots for other people meaning he's simply got patched up but not seen others die. On top of this, seeing someone's head explode right next to you has gotta be something that pushes your training to the test of what you can handle, even if only momentarily, no?
I suppose you mean Eos when you say Rod?
Just you wait until chapter twenty three. When she's doing her little part you'll come running back to her like a kitten after a ball of yarn. I know you.
But yeah, I'm trying to really make her an interesting character and a medic is definitely essential to the team. She has clocked onto what Crimson does in his free time and you're right, she is going to hate patching him up in that respect because she knows he'll constantly be after what little med-x she can carry (what with all the other stuff she has to carry, she ain't no med-x storage facility.)
I mean, she'll still do it because of her duty and who he is anyway, but don't expect her to go all soft and give in to his desire.
DO SOME PUSH UPS SOLDIER. 10 OF THEM.
...No comment.
Oh, and I knew you'd like Zimmy. Stripypone indeed, lol.
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@Hooah: actually this is the army version. Hoorah is Marines...you insult me by saying otherwise
And that all makes sense, thank ya kindly and great work on the chapter.
And that all makes sense, thank ya kindly and great work on the chapter.
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Um..it's THAT important how you write down shout? I mean..it still will sound alike if you hear it.
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YES IT IS
You cannot imagine how many arguments have come from how that word is spelled
You cannot imagine how many arguments have come from how that word is spelled
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