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Re: Fallout Equestria: All That Remains

Post by CamoBadger on Fri Sep 28, 2012 2:42 pm

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Post by Ketchup on Fri Sep 28, 2012 2:52 pm

Oh, I forgot to mention I would be keeping up with your story, chapter 3 sealed it for me.
I'll read 4 soon.
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Post by CamoBadger on Fri Sep 28, 2012 3:55 pm

YAY! Thanks ketchup Fluttershy

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Post by Kippershy on Sat Sep 29, 2012 10:25 am

Spoiler:
I like little doc waking Shayle up the way she does, though the whole "that was night number one of our stay" doesn't quite read right to me.
"That was the first night of our stay" would flow better, though you could account it to zebra mindset.

Felix x Lil Doc?



good to see you can explain her ability to do simple math. I mean, I'm not expecting a complete idiot of a character, but things like simple math ebing taught by Felix is a good reasoning.



Not entirely sure why you're spacing out the dialogue like such when they're speaking about what home is / not having a home any more (right after the caps bit.)
I mean, in my mind it doesn't need to be spaced like that - but that's purely formatting choices and notthing critical.



Shayle taking away Felix's fun with Lil Doc. Damn her! Damn herrrr!



Interesting fight with the raiders, thus far. She's just been knocked down, reading on.
OOoh, unknown sniper fire? Running into a cramped place? Bad move, bad move indeed..




I like the fact they're so happily welcomed in. Zebras do seem the type to just let one another into a settlement as long as they respect the will of Caesar and such. Glad they've got to pull their weight around too.
Gives a good short term objective.




All in all, a good chapter. Fell asleep during it again, delaying how long it took me to read - though that was out of a mixture of back pain, laying down and simply being in a bloody lazy mood today.
Saturday's off for me are literally rarer then gold dust, excluding holidays.
Honestly? I don't remember the last Saturday I had off which wasn't a holiday.
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Post by CamoBadger on Sat Sep 29, 2012 1:14 pm

Thanks for the review Kipper! And I'm glad you liked it.

The bit with them talking about home, I've always been told to separate speech like that, it's the only way I know how to do it. I've tried other things in the past, but it just looks wrong to me (I think that's what you're talking about, if not, I apologize))

And don't worry about it taking a long time to read, life sucks and ruins reading time XD I'm glad you got a nice lazy day, those are awesome.

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Post by Ketchup on Sat Sep 29, 2012 1:37 pm

Just finished chapter 4. Good read.
Starting from chapter 5 I'll try to start doing as-read reviews.
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Post by CamoBadger on Sat Sep 29, 2012 1:50 pm

I'm glad you like it ketchup ^-^

I look forward to the reviews!

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Re: Fallout Equestria: All That Remains

Post by Orm on Sun Sep 30, 2012 8:57 am

This is awesome.
Liking everything about this story so far.
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Why do I get a the feeling something bad is going to happen to Shanty?
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Post by Kippershy on Sun Sep 30, 2012 11:32 am

Orm wrote:This is awesome.
Liking everything about this story so far.
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Why do I get a the feeling something bad is going to happen to Shanty?

Because you've seen two of the characters in a closer detail, and one in semi-detail. Even for as short a time as Shayle & Felix spent there, they got to know the characters well enough to make a credible relevance if they were to be put in harms way... especially if Shayle & Felix were a part of the group who PUT them in harms way.

Lil Doc is also of interest to Felix, though we haven't really seen much from his side of things yet.
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Re: Fallout Equestria: All That Remains

Post by Orm on Sun Sep 30, 2012 1:12 pm

Kippershy wrote:

Because you've seen two of the characters in a closer detail, and one in semi-detail. Even for as short a time as Shayle & Felix spent there, they got to know the characters well enough to make a credible relevance if they were to be put in harms way... especially if Shayle & Felix were a part of the group who PUT them in harms way.

Lil Doc is also of interest to Felix, though we haven't really seen much from his side of things yet.
And the reaction those zebras had didn't make me feel any more comfortable.
I swear if what I think is going to happen happens I'm going to be pissed.
Especially if Charmer dies.
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Post by CamoBadger on Sun Sep 30, 2012 11:44 pm

Specifically Charmer? She seduced you with that little show didn't she?

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Re: Fallout Equestria: All That Remains

Post by Orm on Mon Oct 01, 2012 12:34 am

CamoBadger wrote:Specifically Charmer? She seduced you with that little show didn't she?
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...Kind of.
And I thought the way she interacted with Neishka was really nice.

Damn you and your characters!!!
And I've got a guess as to what will happen at some point in the story.
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Post by CamoBadger on Mon Oct 01, 2012 12:40 am

You can always put your thoughts up here, because I'm never going to confirm or deny what will happen unless it is so far out there it would be a crime to write it.

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Post by Orm on Mon Oct 01, 2012 12:58 am

Okay, basically I'm guessing because Shayle and Felix told those zebras (at least vaguely) about Shanty they're going to go they're and kill the ponies there.

There's my guess.
I'm pretty sure something like that is going to happen.
And if I'm wrong I'm sure I'll be pleasantly surprised.
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Post by CamoBadger on Mon Oct 01, 2012 12:08 pm

I'll say that Shanty will show up again, but the way they show up may surprise you. Whether that is a good surprise or bad surprise you'll have to decide yourself when it happens, but I think it'll be pretty interesting. Probably won't be for a while, but it will come up.

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Post by Orm on Mon Oct 01, 2012 12:34 pm

Why does that just make me worry about it even more.
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Post by Kippershy on Wed Oct 10, 2012 8:39 am



Saw this and thought of Shayle.

(edit: yes I know, pegasus / zebra crossbreed -- that's why only "thought of" and not "thought it was."
Just reminded me of her with the cracked heart C.M Shayle has and zebra colouring.)
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Post by CamoBadger on Wed Oct 10, 2012 11:50 pm

Laura <3

I think I should be honored that you thought of Shayle when you saw that adorable zony...

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Post by CamoBadger on Tue Nov 06, 2012 8:36 pm

Well, I finally got chapter 5 done and added to the original post. I hope there is still at least a little interest in this story after the month and a half I took to update.

Oh, and please enjoy!

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Post by O. Hinds on Wed Nov 07, 2012 12:22 am

CamoBadger wrote:Well, I finally got chapter 5 done and added to the original post. I hope there is still at least a little interest in this story after the month and a half I took to update.

Oh, and please enjoy!
I just finished reading it, and things seem to be developing along interesting lines.
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Post by CamoBadger on Fri Nov 09, 2012 12:39 pm

Thank you O. Hinds! Twilight Sparkle

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Post by Kippershy on Fri Nov 09, 2012 1:05 pm

If I can pull myself together long enough to focus on anything - I'll read it tonight.

Right now I've got a massive case of ADD going on or something.
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Post by CamoBadger on Fri Nov 09, 2012 1:07 pm

It's all good Kipper, no need to torment yourself with trying to read it late at night Twilight Sparkle

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Post by Kippershy on Fri Nov 09, 2012 1:12 pm

Ah, it's not late currently. Only 5pm.
It's just the whole ADD thing I mentioned.

I was wanting to write when I got home, I really was.
Then as soon as I did, I can't keep focus on anything at all - I'm completely forgetting everything after two minutes and if I go do something else, I'll forget I've started something.

No way to write, that. No way to read, either.
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Post by CamoBadger on Fri Nov 09, 2012 1:30 pm

Ahh, sorry to hear about that.

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Post by Ketchup on Fri Nov 09, 2012 3:56 pm

Okie dokie, I intend to read the latest sometime today.
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Post by Ketchup on Sat Nov 10, 2012 1:25 pm

Spoiler:

I forgot much of what happened last chapter, but I'll do my best.
Page 1:
Home is home, no matter what it is.
Okay, I remember the Zebra presence.
First I've heard of concerns of moisture causing rusting in FO:E. Nice, because weapons with rusty internals could easily malfunction.
Page 2:
Blatant lies. For the best, I suppose. He'll have to know eventually, though.
He'll be fine... sure...
I have a feeling they won't be living in Caesar's Stand for very long.
Page 3:
*Insert drinking song here*
Battle saddles?
Page 4:
They seem nice.
I don't understand them either, Shayle.
Page 5:
I find myself wondering if they waste farm yield for alcohol or are the salvaged stocks simply massive?
Just making sure. Riiight...
Page 6:
If he tries something it might end badly. Like, a lot.
Sounds like the Commander is quite popular with his troops.
Page 7:
Called it.
Crisis averted. He is a nice guy.
Again, called it.
Page 8:
What could possibly go wrong scavenging in the wastes?
Small piece of metal? A suppressor, perhaps?
Page 9:
Indeed. Shit happens.
/facehoof.
Page 10:
Oooh. Robots.
Page 11:
I wonder what she means by that.
Everything went better than expected.
Heh, New Oatleans.
Page 12:
Ahh, I get it.
I don't like Seer that much either.
Page 13:
Use of methods to scavenge is usually better. In DayZ, having a plan is crucial when scavenging.
One pony's trash is another pony's treasure.
Page 14:
Being able to read would be an asset in the wastes.
Page 15:
Reminds me of the Dunwich Building in Fallout 3, full of ghouls with good loot in the lowest level.
I thought the equivalent for plasma weapons in FO:E shot purple, not green. I may be mistaken.
Page 16:
Darned protectaponies.
There's the other one.
Page 17:
Sentry bot?
Page 18:
Critical hit.
Page 19:
I wonder what they need circuit boards for. Repairing the zebra robots, perhaps? But this is pony tech.
Wire spool, why would they need that?
Page 20:
Heh, hacking. Indeed, there are many choices.
Shayle isn't the smartest zebra.
Page 21:
I wonder what's in the syringes.
A34-3? Is that a reference?
Oh. That is a sentry bot.
Page 22:
I'm not sure what she did to the robot.
Page 23:
Oh Seer...
I'm guessing the only way for the Remnant to take out Steel Rangers and totally destroy them all would be to use up all their ammo. I'm also guessing it was with a lot of casualties. Or the whole broadcast could be propaganda.
Page 24:
And a bomb drops.
Eeeviilll.
Most enjoyable, yes. I look forward to more. I'm sorry for not getting it done last night, I went to bed early.
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Post by CamoBadger on Sat Nov 10, 2012 1:30 pm

It's all good Ketchup, I'm glad you enjoyed it! And thanks for the review Twilight Sparkle

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Re: Fallout Equestria: All That Remains

Post by CamoBadger on Wed Nov 28, 2012 4:20 pm

Well, Chapter 6 is complete and up in the original post. I hope you all enjoy it! Twilight Sparkle

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Post by Kippershy on Wed Nov 28, 2012 5:04 pm

Still need to read five god damn it. Been getting lazy and forgetful.
I'll try read it tonight, both of them if I can. Don't see why not.
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