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Derpy's Dillema (Work in Progress)

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Post by Apple Crumble Sun Nov 27, 2011 10:05 am

Hello everypony :). This is my first fanfic actually. Since, English isn't my 1st language please go easy on me :D. Its actually in 6 parts which where the main 6 are included. Its a work in progress actually I still have to expand on the following stories


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Any comments would be nice. Angry or supportive comments would be nice and taken into account to improve the story. Comments, Corrections, BURN IT WITH FIRE comments?
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Post by Fluttershy Sun Nov 27, 2011 10:14 am

Ohohoho. Linguz is going to be raging over this until the corrections are finished! XD The fanfic was great. I've posted my first fanfic here too.
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Post by Linguz Sun Nov 27, 2011 10:35 am

I tried to read it. I really did. You are wrong Fluttershy, I go easy on none mane English language speakers... until I revise their fic. At that point, I go as hard as I do to everypony else. Know this Derpy, your fic is a mess. A complete mess. But I've seen and edited worse and longer. Expect me to revise your fic to make it flow better with proper English.
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Post by Apple Crumble Sun Nov 27, 2011 10:47 am

Linguz wrote:I tried to read it. I really did. You are wrong Fluttershy, I go easy on none mane English language speakers... until I revise their fic. At that point, I go as hard as I do to everypony else. Know this Derpy, your fic is a mess. A complete mess. But I've seen and edited worse and longer. Expect me to revise your fic to make it flow better with proper English.

Well I guess its ok since it my first fanfic. I got grammar nazi'd. Anyway thanks for the comments. I'll try to revise it.
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Post by Linguz Sun Nov 27, 2011 10:50 am

I'll help you out in that aspect, if you didn't get that from the other post. I've done worse so it's not like it'll kill me.
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Post by Apple Crumble Sun Nov 27, 2011 10:55 am

Sorry about the english. Have a apology cupcake.
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Post by Linguz Sun Nov 27, 2011 11:01 am

I'll take it and tell you again, "Don't worry. I've seen worse."
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Post by Apple Crumble Sun Nov 27, 2011 11:04 am

Yea I got it the first time. Thanks btw for the help. Instead of just commenting on the story you did more than I had hoped for. Thank you. A thank you muffin is in order. Have some
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