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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.

Post by CamoBadger on Fri Sep 28, 2012 2:38 pm

Chapter 3:

Really Crimson, "return the favor"?

Won't lie...I thought the pony at the bottom of the ravine was going to be part of a trap. Good to see otherwise, and even better to see and AJ's Ranger.

HUZZAH! Timeframe! Good to know that he's getting out into the Wasteland just as everyone in the Wasteland is about to hate pegasi about 100x more than they already did...

"Holla...holla"? Oh god...I hate Molten Rain already...

"Don't run from me puppy, I only want to play with you"...10 POINTS TO CRIMSONDORE!

"I'M THE ONLY ONE WHO BITES HIM" ...20 POINTS TO CHERRYPUFF

Wait...did Cherry just say killing is something you should never wish to do...after clubbing a wolf to death with a rock? ...mares be crazy

A surprise, in a giant pony head? Oh this will be good...
ZAAAAAAR-DOOOOOOOOOOZ

"What do you think of me" Popcorn time?
HAAAA! YOU GET NOTHING!

What's that, someone just said he doesn't think anything will happen on your shift? *pulls on the-shits-gonna-go-down-pants*

"Oh, I'll watch the flank alright"
1) Definitely read this in Shawn Connery's voice
2) 10 POINTS TO FALLENCLAW

What is it with Cherry and squishing skulls? She's starting to scare me a little...

SWEET MOTHER OF LUNA. 50 POINTS TO CRIMSONDORE!

...now...how will Cherry react mewonders?
Great chapter. I just hope Crimson stays this way and doesn't fall into some depression and start whining about killing raiders. We've gotten enough of that from BJ.

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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.

Post by Kippershy on Fri Sep 28, 2012 3:08 pm

CamoBadger wrote:
Chapter 3:

Really Crimson, "return the favor"?

Won't lie...I thought the pony at the bottom of the ravine was going to be part of a trap. Good to see otherwise, and even better to see and AJ's Ranger.

HUZZAH! Timeframe! Good to know that he's getting out into the Wasteland just as everyone in the Wasteland is about to hate pegasi about 100x more than they already did...

"Holla...holla"? Oh god...I hate Molten Rain already...

"Don't run from me puppy, I only want to play with you"...10 POINTS TO CRIMSONDORE!

"I'M THE ONLY ONE WHO BITES HIM" ...20 POINTS TO CHERRYPUFF

Wait...did Cherry just say killing is something you should never wish to do...after clubbing a wolf to death with a rock? ...mares be crazy

A surprise, in a giant pony head? Oh this will be good...
ZAAAAAAR-DOOOOOOOOOOZ

"What do you think of me" Popcorn time?
HAAAA! YOU GET NOTHING!

What's that, someone just said he doesn't think anything will happen on your shift? *pulls on the-shits-gonna-go-down-pants*

"Oh, I'll watch the flank alright"
1) Definitely read this in Shawn Connery's voice
2) 10 POINTS TO FALLENCLAW

What is it with Cherry and squishing skulls? She's starting to scare me a little...

SWEET MOTHER OF LUNA. 50 POINTS TO CRIMSONDORE!

...now...how will Cherry react mewonders?
Great chapter. I just hope Crimson stays this way and doesn't fall into some depression and start whining about killing raiders. We've gotten enough of that from BJ.

Depression from killing raiders? Oh fuck no!
I won't spoil this for you... but...
Crimson has no regret about what he did. However, he'll have a split second moment of regret over something stupid later on, but it's not the first thing. It's something stupidly laughable.
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.

Post by Kippershy on Fri Sep 28, 2012 3:14 pm

Oh, also, thank you for the review!
I'm exceptionally glad you very much liked the execution. He fucking had it coming to him, and I knew Somber would never write it - so I did instead.

I was still really wound up about it, so there was nothing I could do. It had to be done!



Cherry has a thing for skulls.


edit: oh, and another thing, especially like the whole Crimsondore / Cherrypuff / Fallenclaw thing. Hilarious!
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Post by CamoBadger on Fri Sep 28, 2012 3:57 pm

Glad to hear he won't be depressed over it, I would probably flip a table XD

And since you like it, I shall continue using it Sweetie Belle

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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.

Post by Kippershy on Sun Sep 30, 2012 2:13 am

and this just came through:
God I love Fizzy (Ask Fizzy's mod) so damn much.



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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.

Post by Kippershy on Mon Oct 01, 2012 2:28 pm

This post right here? This post is to get me getting my ass into gear and get on with the chapter - to try have it released tonight.

/must begin to ignore all distractions and write faster/
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.

Post by Kippershy on Mon Oct 01, 2012 7:24 pm

Chapter 15 is released, longest one yet.
with credits it hits 13.5k words
without them it's 13.1k words


...which I know is nothing on Horizons or even Heroes, but to me, it's the longest one yet.
...which brings my total over 161k
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Post by CamoBadger on Mon Oct 01, 2012 7:26 pm

Must...catch up...faster...

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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.

Post by Kippershy on Mon Oct 01, 2012 7:39 pm

haha, take as long as you need.
I've got the next chapter planned out to some extent, but I'm definitely thinking it'll need more content to be a whole chapter.

Gonna start work on it tomorrow maybe.
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.

Post by Ketchup on Mon Oct 01, 2012 9:01 pm

Kippershy wrote:Chapter 15 is released, longest one yet.
with credits it hits 13.5k words
without them it's 13.1k words


...which I know is nothing on Horizons or even Heroes, but to me, it's the longest one yet.
...which brings my total over 161k
Whee.
I'll read it after school tomorrow.
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.

Post by Ketchup on Tue Oct 02, 2012 5:42 pm

Review.
Spoiler:

Looks immediately like a pre-war memory. Perhaps the alicorns are involved.
Looks like a very peaceful atmosphere. I actually have to write a scene with specific mood for homework tonight.
Ponyville.
Of course it involved them alicorns.
That's nice. If only I could remember my dreams.
Of course, he has nightmares of Platinum...
Alicorns are really big. And Eos seems to use that to be supreme at cuddling.
Beacuz ur shuper spschul, Crimson.
Nah, because you help ponies. Because helping is nice.
Kinda interesting story on how she followed him.
Loneliness sucks.
"Trix-"? Hrrrm.
Silly Titan.
"I... wait, hat are you asking me for? Surely you should ask her?"
Maybe 'what', not 'hat?
Eos is being sort of strange. Well, always, I guess.
Dat Charisma.
That's funny. Lt. Colonel Wings, from when the bunker designated him as such.

Dark Dew. Funny name, that one, but I'd bet some context could be given for the name.
A donkey? I wonder if there is an established algorithm for naming donkeys like ponies have.
"These two zebras" reminds me of Camo's fic.
Dat auto-camouflage.
What could possibly go wrong? Also, "a city that never sleeps" seems to apply.
Way to let things slip, Crimson.
Good that he understands that. I don't, but whatever.
Nice little operation going there.
Information is great.
He doesn't seem convinced they are so 'lovely'.
Nice to buy a gift for Cherry.
Good for this one, PLAC.
"Some pegasus" indeed.
Good deal.
"Crimson, and dolor hic tibi proderit olim. to you."
Extra period in there.
This is where the preview was. Dis gon be gud.
"Without a moments pause, I headbutted straight into the opponents groin..."
Apostrophe missing in opponent's.
I don't think Titan will like that message. Or the Coalition.
Quite a conversation.
Hit the hornet's nest with a hammer, would you?
Surefire doesn't like it either.
A winged devil... that steals stock... Mmk...
Maisy.
Crimson's being silly again.
Titan is pretty good at this, though.
Dat contact.
Swords are cool.
"I want you yo reconfirm who you're trying to find."
'to' for 'yo'.
The Merchant is a Spy!
Stupid spy.
Again, dis gon be gud.
Gah, spear.
And now Anarchists.
But then, Maisy.
Badass ninja companion?
Barracks seem dangerous, all the same. No snipers at these ones, I hope.
Re:Footnote.
Maisy seemed really powerful, but zebras with spears are no match, anyhow. Great bruiser, I suggest she be a bit slower in future battles, though.

Also, typo in the thanks for PH, 'Horzions' is what you wrote.
Enjoyable chapter. Planned on reading half now, and the rest later, but I got sucked in.
That's a good thing.
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.

Post by Kippershy on Wed Oct 03, 2012 7:23 am

ketchup504 wrote:Review.
Spoiler:

Looks immediately like a pre-war memory. Perhaps the alicorns are involved.
Looks like a very peaceful atmosphere. I actually have to write a scene with specific mood for homework tonight.
Ponyville.
Of course it involved them alicorns.
That's nice. If only I could remember my dreams.
Of course, he has nightmares of Platinum...
Alicorns are really big. And Eos seems to use that to be supreme at cuddling.
Beacuz ur shuper spschul, Crimson.
Nah, because you help ponies. Because helping is nice.
Kinda interesting story on how she followed him.
Loneliness sucks.
"Trix-"? Hrrrm.
Silly Titan.
"I... wait, hat are you asking me for? Surely you should ask her?"
Maybe 'what', not 'hat?
Eos is being sort of strange. Well, always, I guess.
Dat Charisma.
That's funny. Lt. Colonel Wings, from when the bunker designated him as such.

Dark Dew. Funny name, that one, but I'd bet some context could be given for the name.
A donkey? I wonder if there is an established algorithm for naming donkeys like ponies have.
"These two zebras" reminds me of Camo's fic.
Dat auto-camouflage.
What could possibly go wrong? Also, "a city that never sleeps" seems to apply.
Way to let things slip, Crimson.
Good that he understands that. I don't, but whatever.
Nice little operation going there.
Information is great.
He doesn't seem convinced they are so 'lovely'.
Nice to buy a gift for Cherry.
Good for this one, PLAC.
"Some pegasus" indeed.
Good deal.
"Crimson, and dolor hic tibi proderit olim. to you."
Extra period in there.
This is where the preview was. Dis gon be gud.
"Without a moments pause, I headbutted straight into the opponents groin..."
Apostrophe missing in opponent's.
I don't think Titan will like that message. Or the Coalition.
Quite a conversation.
Hit the hornet's nest with a hammer, would you?
Surefire doesn't like it either.
A winged devil... that steals stock... Mmk...
Maisy.
Crimson's being silly again.
Titan is pretty good at this, though.
Dat contact.
Swords are cool.
"I want you yo reconfirm who you're trying to find."
'to' for 'yo'.
The Merchant is a Spy!
Stupid spy.
Again, dis gon be gud.
Gah, spear.
And now Anarchists.
But then, Maisy.
Badass ninja companion?
Barracks seem dangerous, all the same. No snipers at these ones, I hope.
Re:Footnote.
Maisy seemed really powerful, but zebras with spears are no match, anyhow. Great bruiser, I suggest she be a bit slower in future battles, though.

Also, typo in the thanks for PH, 'Horzions' is what you wrote.
Enjoyable chapter. Planned on reading half now, and the rest later, but I got sucked in.
That's a good thing.

Awesome, thank you.
Glad I managed to get you sucked in, that's a wonderful thing to hear. Thank you.

Fixed the issues you found (thanks for those) and definitely going to take your suggestion with slowing down Maisy in fights.
Thank you for the review, it's always amazing to read reviews.
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.

Post by Kippershy on Thu Oct 18, 2012 11:01 am

Sneak peek at a upcoming piece of art.
I absolutely adore it myself.

Spoiler:

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Post by Kippershy on Thu Oct 18, 2012 4:10 pm

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Post by CamoBadger on Thu Oct 18, 2012 4:19 pm

So...amazing...

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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.

Post by Kippershy on Thu Oct 18, 2012 4:33 pm

Yup, the artwork by the Ask Fizzy mod again <3 I love her so damn much.
http://ofcatsandkings.tumblr.com/ < mod blog
http://ask-fizzy.tumblr.com/ < Ask Fizzy


The picture is a spoiler for you, which is something I should've thought about, but not too much harm done I hope.

Names in respective order in spoiler tag:

Spoiler:
Helios, Eos & Selene
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Post by CamoBadger on Thu Oct 18, 2012 4:37 pm

Ah, oh well, I just thought it was 3 adorable alicorns XD

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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.

Post by Kippershy on Thu Oct 18, 2012 4:48 pm

Well, it's not a huge spoiler. I mean, knowing they exist doesn't ruin the whole story or anything - though it will explain something once you hit chapter... five? I think.
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Post by Kippershy on Thu Oct 18, 2012 4:56 pm

Came to my attention that the art/ask blog wasn't posted up here.
So, here's the link.

http://foe-brokenbonds.tumblr.com/

contains spoilers, obviously.
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Post by Kippershy on Tue Oct 30, 2012 1:14 pm

Currently streaming as I write.
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Post by Kippershy on Sat Nov 17, 2012 7:04 pm

Chapter sixteen is up, amazingly.
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.

Post by Ketchup on Sun Nov 18, 2012 7:58 am

I intend to read it sometime in the next day or so, perhaps today. I'm not sure I'd want to do a review right now, so I'll put it off.
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Post by CamoBadger on Thu Nov 29, 2012 6:34 pm

Well, I'm finally reading fics again, so it's time to start back up on Chapter 4!

review:

That name...The Taste of Blood...I think I'll like this one.

Cherry...stop being soft...Cherry...oh, wait. Okay, that might be overkill on her part...even I wouldn't do that.

Really Cherry? After beating a dead body up you're going to...wait, nevermind. D'awwwww.

Cherry, I love you so much. Rare Wolf Steak? You're awesome.
WAIT. You kissed her and tasted blood. THAT'S THE NAME OF THE CHAPTER!

10 points to Cherrypuff for getting Crimson to eat that steak.

It must be 'Embarrass Crimson in Every Way' day.

At this point I can't tell if Cherry is just overly-protective of Crimson, or if she's just doing everything he wants to gain his trust and screw him over later...

This is my kind of doctor. Why pay for a bodyguard when you can just learn to shoot?

How does Cherry know about wounds, Doc? She shoots ponies a lot. At least that's what I would assume...

Everything is better with a wallop from Maisy.

Awwww, Maisy.
Wait a sec...what's this...it's...THE QUEST ALARM! Crimson is going to try and kill those Raiders methinks...oh, and they'll have a minigun, because Crimson thought about it, so it will happen.

Luna reference! Automatic 10 points to Crimsondore!

Like I said, everything is better with a wallop from Maisy.
Awww, no minigun?

REALLY CRIMSON?! GETTING UPSET OVER KILLING PONIES THAT JUST SHOT AT YOU?
Thank you Maisy.

Did he just shoot CHERRY?! HE DID! KILL HIM!
And he gets away...damnit Crimson. Oh well, I guess it's smart as long as Cherry lives.

Maisy is best manticore.

From the number of potions that Crimson is using on everyone that isn't in his group, I have a feeling that something very bad will happen and he'll be SOL.

Awwwwww, such a cute moment. But this is FOE, I'm putting on my shit-is-going-to-happen pants again.

Crimson...uh...while you're going to help build that town up, shouldn't you at least tell the rest of your caravan you're okay?

Mayor...Gut-Rot...wow....don't even want to know why you have that name

Why...why do you have a bunch of TNT? Or is this another one of those things I probably don't want to know?

"I HAVE NO IDEA"
10 points to Cherrypuff the Mad Bomber. She's way ahead...

Are you sure her special talent isn't explosives? She's gotta have a skill of 100 already.

Cherry, stopping you from saying "I love you"? Either she's just trying to be cute, or she doesn't believe it when you say it Crimson...eh, probably the former. Not everyone is as pessimistic as me Spike
Great chapter. Disappointed in the lack of a minigun, but oh well, I'm sure one will show up eventually.
Sorry it took so long to get this read Kip.

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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.

Post by Kippershy on Thu Nov 29, 2012 8:26 pm

First of all, so much wub for another review <3 Love 'em as always.
Now, for my response =3

Cherry does act a little weird considering the raider is now a corpse... but her reasons are elaborated on further in the story.

She's a real mare! A bit of raw meat won't kill her, just put some hair on her chest! Owai-
haha. Anyway, yeah. Living in post-war Equestria, you gotta learn to deal with eating whatever you can get, barring cannibalism.

Embarrass Crimson day? If given the chance, that's every day!

Yeah, Doc is a silly pony. I can't even remember their conversation proper but I do recall her being silly.

Psh, communication pmshunication.

What? I mean, who DOESN'T have TNT just lying around? LOL

She's skilled in them for sure, but not her special talent. hah.

Actually, your first instinct is right. She doesn't believe it at first.



would respond with more but trying to get your chapter read while I'm awake and not being required to help people out on DayZ which keeps happening.
Anyway. yeah. Thank you =3
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.

Post by CamoBadger on Thu Nov 29, 2012 8:29 pm

No problem, you wrote a great story! I'm going to try and get 1 chapter out every day or two until I catch up, but with my schedule that might not happen. Regardless, I WILL catch up someday!

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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.

Post by CamoBadger on Sun Dec 02, 2012 5:00 pm

Well, got a few chapters done while I was out of town, so let's do a review. Not going to be quite as in depth as my others since I forgot to take notes as I read, but I'll do my best here. It won't be in order, just some observations from the chapters.
Chapter 5-8:

1) Found an error in Ch. 7: Crimson said they only had 300 caps, but he spent 350 on ammo and another 100 on medical supplies. If this has already been pointed out and fixed, I apologize, I think I'm reading a rather old version, but it just bugged me a little.

2) Cherry has officially moved out of being awesome and into just straight up turning me on during these chapters. She so damn sexy...

3) Eos. I am very interested in her, because she's mysterious and I just want to know more so bad. Her dreams are rather cryptic, but I can kinda tell what's going on in them from Fallout Equestria and the symbolism of white and red light. Interested to see what the brown is though...

4) Chapter 8. I know you said at the end that you're sorry for going so dark, but I loved it. Up to this point, Crimson had seen some bad stuff, but he got through it and has moved on. But the ferals and what they did, to me, seems like the first time Crimson has seen exactly how horrible the wasteland can be. I'd imagine it's going to stick with him, and that he's going to be having a really tough time for a while. Thank the goddess he saved that baby, because I have a feeling that little foal is going to be the thing that helps him realize the even through all the horrors, there is always a little light to keep you sane (of course Cherry will help, but she can only do so much by telling Crimson it wasn't his fault and such). It was probably the greatest chapter so far, just because it is the first thing to really tear down Crimson.

Oh, and Prince Snugglebums.

Those are the really big things I wanted to point out. Sorry I couldn't give as detailed of a review this time, but trying to recall everything that happened and which chapter it was in would be challenging.

Great work on these chapters and this entire story, I love it.

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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.

Post by Kippershy on Sun Dec 02, 2012 5:24 pm

CamoBabs wrote:Well, got a few chapters done while I was out of town, so let's do a review. Not going to be quite as in depth as my others since I forgot to take notes as I read, but I'll do my best here. It won't be in order, just some observations from the chapters.
Chapter 5-8:

1) Found an error in Ch. 7: Crimson said they only had 300 caps, but he spent 350 on ammo and another 100 on medical supplies. If this has already been pointed out and fixed, I apologize, I think I'm reading a rather old version, but it just bugged me a little.

2) Cherry has officially moved out of being awesome and into just straight up turning me on during these chapters. She so damn sexy...

3) Eos. I am very interested in her, because she's mysterious and I just want to know more so bad. Her dreams are rather cryptic, but I can kinda tell what's going on in them from Fallout Equestria and the symbolism of white and red light. Interested to see what the brown is though...

4) Chapter 8. I know you said at the end that you're sorry for going so dark, but I loved it. Up to this point, Crimson had seen some bad stuff, but he got through it and has moved on. But the ferals and what they did, to me, seems like the first time Crimson has seen exactly how horrible the wasteland can be. I'd imagine it's going to stick with him, and that he's going to be having a really tough time for a while. Thank the goddess he saved that baby, because I have a feeling that little foal is going to be the thing that helps him realize the even through all the horrors, there is always a little light to keep you sane (of course Cherry will help, but she can only do so much by telling Crimson it wasn't his fault and such). It was probably the greatest chapter so far, just because it is the first thing to really tear down Crimson.

Oh, and Prince Snugglebums.

Those are the really big things I wanted to point out. Sorry I couldn't give as detailed of a review this time, but trying to recall everything that happened and which chapter it was in would be challenging.

Great work on these chapters and this entire story, I love it.

Thank you very much =3 <3 so much wub for you and this.
Especially for the comment about the dark chapter.



I'll definitely have to fix the money mistake, that's what happens when you try to keep track of caps like you do early on, before you can justify just pulling numbers out of your ass after having sold shitloads of loot.
Think I'll fix that up tomorrow or something, so yeah, thanks for pointing it out to me.


Glad that Cherry manages to work her magic. I did try to make her something interesting in that sense, without having to go into too much detail about all that kind've stuff. There will be a .5 chapter, but not just yet. That comes later on.


Eos is a very interesting mare indeed. I'm glad you like her and I'm glad you're interested. That's something I've admittedly been lacking in putting into proper detail as of late, think I'll do that.
Maybe even in the chapter after next.


Originally I was sorry, but now? I think you're right. Kim ripped me a new one for what I did, but that's Kim.
It brought the story to a whole new level of darkness, gave Crimson a slice of the real world at its worst and did the job it was supposed to do.
It's in need of a rewrite for better quality stuff and all, but eh, I'll work on that eventually, ha.
I'm so very glad you enjoyed it though, it has been a very love it / hate it chapter with a lot of controversy in real life about it.
I'm also glad you've said the things you had, because you're pretty much on the mark and it makes me feel good because that means I wrote the follow up well enough that you'd assume that's how it'd affect him, if you get what I mean.
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.

Post by CamoBadger on Sun Dec 02, 2012 5:32 pm

No problem man, glad I helped out with it somehow Twilight Sparkle

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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.

Post by Ketchup on Sun Dec 02, 2012 5:54 pm

I read the chapter, I can give feedback next time we Skype. I didn't feel up to writing reviews, but I felt like reading FO:E. Might read the latest ATR, too.
Good chapter.
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.

Post by CamoBadger on Sun Dec 02, 2012 7:34 pm

Well, I'm gonna continue on and hit Chapter 9, so here we go.

Chapter 9:

Wow...quite a dream there, can't imagine that will help his current mental state.

Still love Cherry, she's great. Glad she managed to calm down Crimson here, but I still think it'll only do so much for him. She's great for him, but sometimes even that isn't enough.

Hm, look at that. Well at least she got him through Platinum's death before his mind condemned him to thinking about his future. And great job here, showing his worry for the future. Couldn't save a few ponies, and is supposed to be in charge of the entirety of Four Ridges someday; definitely something that will keep him crippled in the near future.

Hates ghouls, new companion is a ghoul. This should be fun.

Problems at home? Wonderful! I detect that something very bad is going to happen very soon.
"What was to be next? My mother dying?"
...well, I'll get the tissues

And now we know why Cherry didn't believe he actually loved her. And for some reason I think she still doesn't fully believe him.

Oh, he only hates Feral's right now. No fun How

Stupid guards are stupid.

You were just tackled by 3 ghouls. Those three were killed, leaving 9 left. And you put away your gun to go look at Platinum? Really now Crimson? I understand you're in shock from seeing the body again, but could you try to be reasonable for 10 seconds here?
And again. Five ferals are charging you, and you decide to give a speech to the merchant about your new knife? You really don't have any fighting instincts in that little brain do you Crimson?
And the guards are about to die as you talked. What did we learn?
Oh well, it all worked out, no more sore feelings for Crimson today.

He really loves telling his stories. I think he's told the story about Maisy...10 times now? All to different ponies.

Bow chicka bow wow. Wait, Crimson's actually a good guy. Fine, looks like the merchant will just have to screw one of her really crappy guards. I hope they're better with their gun than with a pistol.

And now the addiction is here. Methinks that Cherry will be disappointed when she learns of this little detail...

Oh look! Four Ridges! Time for something bad to happen.

Crimson, you do realize that Sunburn is IN CHARGE of the TMC, right? As such, I have a feeling she was Spec Ops at some point.
*grabs popcorn*
And she's whipping him...he's beating her...she's making him her bitch...he loses his mind...
And Crimson wins. Why am I slightly disappointed?

Cherished Chance, huh? Yup, definitely going to be his little light to keep him from falling completely into darkness from the ghoul incident, and probably other bad shit he sees as they continue their journey. Don't expect to see her much, but oh well.

Good chapter here. Lots of good interactions and explaining feelings that so far had been masked or subtle (especially from Cherry). And I really liked the lighthearted ending there, such a good thing to see for Crimson after what happened with Platinum and the others.

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