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Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.

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Post by Kippershy Sat Sep 01, 2012 11:12 am

Images fixed now.
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Post by Kippershy Sun Sep 16, 2012 5:16 pm

Chapter fourteen released.
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Post by Ketchup Sun Sep 16, 2012 6:12 pm

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I'll probably read it after school tomorrow, watching a Paper Mario 2 LP.
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Post by Ketchup Mon Sep 17, 2012 6:32 pm

Review now. I am, and have gotten, rather sick with the cold that goes around every year, so this one will probably be less thorough than any before it.
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Post by Kippershy Tue Sep 18, 2012 12:18 am

ketchup504 wrote:Review now. I am, and have gotten, rather sick with the cold that goes around every year, so this one will probably be less thorough than any before it.
Spoiler:

Thank you Ketch, as always it's absolutely wonderful to have your reviews and it means a lot to me. Thank you.
I'm glad that you managed to catch a lot of the references.

True that a royal flush is higher - I just didn't want to give Crimson the absolute highest ranking hand and make it a complete mary sue moment where he's given the very, very most elite stuff to achieve his goal, even if that is a hand of poker.

I'm glad it wasn't boring for you, even if you did skim over the mushy stuff - I expect that to be done by some people as it's not to everyone's tastes, just like Katarn skips over intimacy & fight scenes. (of just about every fic.)
So as long as you enjoyed it, it doesn't really matter. That was just me giving them some mushy mushy happy happy loving tender moments.

Sorry I can't give a full response right now, gotta head off to work, but again, thank you for this, it means a lot.
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Post by CamoBadger Thu Sep 20, 2012 7:38 pm

Well, I finished up with Chapter 1 and am working through Chapter 2. Sorry it took me so long to finally start reading this Kipper, I think I told you I would way back when you first posted it here...

My reviews probably won't be good in the way of helping with edits and such (I'm not good at that stuff), but will be more of what I thought of the story so far, sorry if you already get enough of that stuff.

Okay, Ch1
Spoiler:

Like I said, can't really do edit stuff, but I'll put my random thoughts of the story up after each chapter XD

Good work Kipper, I regret not reading this until now, it's amazing!
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Post by Kippershy Fri Sep 21, 2012 12:07 am

CamoBadger wrote:Well, I finished up with Chapter 1 and am working through Chapter 2. Sorry it took me so long to finally start reading this Kipper, I think I told you I would way back when you first posted it here...

My reviews probably won't be good in the way of helping with edits and such (I'm not good at that stuff), but will be more of what I thought of the story so far, sorry if you already get enough of that stuff.

Okay, Ch1
Spoiler:

Like I said, can't really do edit stuff, but I'll put my random thoughts of the story up after each chapter XD

Good work Kipper, I regret not reading this until now, it's amazing!

You big ol' flatterer. My intro chapter really isn't all that, none of my story is, but I'm glad you liked it.
I've gone and fixed some minor errors yesterday, though I know there's more that I refused to allow myself to go and edit because I was trying to enjoy reading it, rather than picking it apart.

So I will go through it again for grammar, but it's mostly okay.
Haven't read my chapter two yet though.
Ha. sounds so weird, that I write but don't read my own chapters after releasing them.


So yeah, thank you for this! =3
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Post by Kippershy Sun Sep 23, 2012 4:02 pm

So, this is a very out of date point to make -- but something came up in the P.Horizons thread that made me think for a moment.

Someone brought up the fact that Cherished Chance uses magic to easily pull out one of Crimsons feathers, when in S2 rainbow gets a feather trapped under a rock and isn't able to release herself from it.
However, also in S2, in H&Hooves day, Sweetie Bell EASILY pulls a feather from Scootaloo to stir the love poison potion with.


Which only further backs my response that perhaps Dashie caught an entire section of her wing under the rock, as much as it only looks like a single feather?
I mean, feathers are like skin, anyway, they grow back and they shed as time goes on so a single feather (or even a few) wouldn't make a difference.

It's only when [you] lose a large portion of them that it makes any difference.
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Post by Kippershy Sun Sep 23, 2012 4:03 pm

Oh, also, 4.3k into chapter 15.
This chapter is looking like it'll be anywhere from 12k - 15k long, so it'll be longer then usual.

I plan to have it out on/by Saturday.
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Post by CamoBadger Fri Sep 28, 2012 1:32 pm

I'm sorry it took so long to get through this, but I'm done with Chapter 2 finally. So, thoughtses time!
Chapter 2:
Great chapter, I'm loving this story! Time for #3!
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Post by CamoBadger Fri Sep 28, 2012 2:38 pm

Chapter 3:
Great chapter. I just hope Crimson stays this way and doesn't fall into some depression and start whining about killing raiders. We've gotten enough of that from BJ.
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Post by Kippershy Fri Sep 28, 2012 3:08 pm

CamoBadger wrote:
Chapter 3:
Great chapter. I just hope Crimson stays this way and doesn't fall into some depression and start whining about killing raiders. We've gotten enough of that from BJ.

Depression from killing raiders? Oh fuck no!
I won't spoil this for you... but...
Crimson has no regret about what he did. However, he'll have a split second moment of regret over something stupid later on, but it's not the first thing. It's something stupidly laughable.
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Post by Kippershy Fri Sep 28, 2012 3:14 pm

Oh, also, thank you for the review!
I'm exceptionally glad you very much liked the execution. He fucking had it coming to him, and I knew Somber would never write it - so I did instead.

I was still really wound up about it, so there was nothing I could do. It had to be done!



Cherry has a thing for skulls.


edit: oh, and another thing, especially like the whole Crimsondore / Cherrypuff / Fallenclaw thing. Hilarious!
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Post by CamoBadger Fri Sep 28, 2012 3:57 pm

Glad to hear he won't be depressed over it, I would probably flip a table XD

And since you like it, I shall continue using it Sweetie Belle
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Post by Kippershy Sun Sep 30, 2012 2:13 am

and this just came through:
God I love Fizzy (Ask Fizzy's mod) so damn much.

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Post by Kippershy Mon Oct 01, 2012 2:28 pm

This post right here? This post is to get me getting my ass into gear and get on with the chapter - to try have it released tonight.

/must begin to ignore all distractions and write faster/
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Post by Kippershy Mon Oct 01, 2012 7:24 pm

Chapter 15 is released, longest one yet.
with credits it hits 13.5k words
without them it's 13.1k words


...which I know is nothing on Horizons or even Heroes, but to me, it's the longest one yet.
...which brings my total over 161k
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Post by CamoBadger Mon Oct 01, 2012 7:26 pm

Must...catch up...faster...
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Post by Kippershy Mon Oct 01, 2012 7:39 pm

haha, take as long as you need.
I've got the next chapter planned out to some extent, but I'm definitely thinking it'll need more content to be a whole chapter.

Gonna start work on it tomorrow maybe.
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Post by Ketchup Mon Oct 01, 2012 9:01 pm

Kippershy wrote:Chapter 15 is released, longest one yet.
with credits it hits 13.5k words
without them it's 13.1k words


...which I know is nothing on Horizons or even Heroes, but to me, it's the longest one yet.
...which brings my total over 161k
Whee.
I'll read it after school tomorrow.
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Post by Ketchup Tue Oct 02, 2012 5:42 pm

Review.
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Enjoyable chapter. Planned on reading half now, and the rest later, but I got sucked in.
That's a good thing.
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Post by Kippershy Wed Oct 03, 2012 7:23 am

ketchup504 wrote:Review.
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Enjoyable chapter. Planned on reading half now, and the rest later, but I got sucked in.
That's a good thing.

Awesome, thank you.
Glad I managed to get you sucked in, that's a wonderful thing to hear. Thank you.

Fixed the issues you found (thanks for those) and definitely going to take your suggestion with slowing down Maisy in fights.
Thank you for the review, it's always amazing to read reviews.
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Post by Kippershy Thu Oct 18, 2012 11:01 am

Sneak peek at a upcoming piece of art.
I absolutely adore it myself.

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Post by CamoBadger Thu Oct 18, 2012 4:19 pm

So...amazing...
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Post by Kippershy Thu Oct 18, 2012 4:33 pm

Yup, the artwork by the Ask Fizzy mod again <3 I love her so damn much.
http://ofcatsandkings.tumblr.com/ < mod blog
http://ask-fizzy.tumblr.com/ < Ask Fizzy


The picture is a spoiler for you, which is something I should've thought about, but not too much harm done I hope.

Names in respective order in spoiler tag:

Spoiler:
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Post by CamoBadger Thu Oct 18, 2012 4:37 pm

Ah, oh well, I just thought it was 3 adorable alicorns XD
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Post by Kippershy Thu Oct 18, 2012 4:48 pm

Well, it's not a huge spoiler. I mean, knowing they exist doesn't ruin the whole story or anything - though it will explain something once you hit chapter... five? I think.
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Post by Kippershy Thu Oct 18, 2012 4:56 pm

Came to my attention that the art/ask blog wasn't posted up here.
So, here's the link.

http://foe-brokenbonds.tumblr.com/

contains spoilers, obviously.
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Post by Kippershy Tue Oct 30, 2012 1:14 pm

Currently streaming as I write.
Watch here: http://www.livestream.com/kippershygamingstream
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