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Starmetal Sword Chronicles

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Post by Exodus Hero Tue Feb 11, 2014 11:35 pm

Spoiler Alert! If you haven't read Fallout Equestria: Project Horizon up to chapter Sixty Two, its probably best you read that before coming to this story (although if you don't mind minor spoilers, I'd welcome you to read). You have been fairly warned! Spoilers will probably be in the text below! Spoilers!

The following narrative is intended to be a couple of small chapters highlighting the adventures of a Radroach in his quest to find the Champion of the Starmetal Sword.

I've made this thread in order for people to give me praise to point out the typos and errors that I can't see as the author. Any pointers will help a lot and also hopefully improve my writing in the long run. Thanks for taking the time to read and have a nice day!

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Post by Admiral Stoic Rum Wed Feb 12, 2014 8:42 pm

seems plausable, how can the rad roach survive in the core?
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Post by Exodus Hero Fri Feb 14, 2014 4:20 pm

Admiral Stoic Rum wrote:seems plausable, how can the rad roach survive in the core?
Survive the enervation or just the harsh nature of core in general?
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Post by Rusty Hooves Sun Feb 16, 2014 5:47 am

Dude, this looks pretty cool.  I'm going to read this asap.  I'll try to provide feedback soon.  <insert relevant smiley here>
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Post by Rusty Hooves Mon Feb 17, 2014 9:52 pm

I've read parts 1 and 2 and I am enjoying so far.  
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I would like to read more of this story, looking forward to the rest of this and I hope we do get to reach Black Jack in the end.
Good luck on your work on this!  /] \_
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Post by Exodus Hero Tue Feb 18, 2014 12:41 am

Rusty Hooves wrote:I've read parts 1 and 2 and I am enjoying so far.  
story stuff:
I would like to read more of this story, looking forward to the rest of this and I hope we do get to reach Black Jack in the end.
Good luck on your work on this!  /] \_
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Thanks for reading!

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Post by Meleagridis Fri Feb 21, 2014 12:59 pm

I love how Slave Willing is basically a samurai. Obey the master even in vileness for fear of dishonor. The dialogue is wonderfully campy, I was chuckling for a lot of this. Judging by the rain and the raider mercy killing, it's in Hoofington, right?

Rusty Hooves wrote:
Good luck on your work on this!  /] \_
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Exodus Hero wrote: _/ [\
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Post by Exodus Hero Fri Feb 21, 2014 6:15 pm

Meleagridis wrote:I love how Slave Willing is basically a samurai. Obey the master even in vileness for fear of dishonor. The dialogue is wonderfully campy, I was chuckling for a lot of this. Judging by the rain and the raider mercy killing, it's in Hoofington, right?

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Good luck on your work on this!  /] \_
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Exodus Hero wrote: _/ [\
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Thanks for reading!
The setting is indeed in Hoofington. :)
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