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Post by alfredofroylan on Sun Sep 08, 2013 12:11 pm

Hello there, this's a comic that I wrote and Madmax is doing the art. It's a 10 pages story about Sweetie Bot. I'd love to check some feedback on this one, mostly for the story, thanks a lot!!

http://alfredofroylan2.deviantart.com/art/Fallout-Equestria-Shining-Hearts-Page-1-of-10-397237377

http://alfredofroylan2.deviantart.com/art/Fallout-Equestria-Shining-Hearts-Page-2-of-10-398916066


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Re: Fallout Equestria:Shining Hearts (Finished)

Post by Frost on Sun Sep 08, 2013 12:20 pm

I was wondering what was with the Balefire explosion on page 2. I would think that's not something that happens every day.
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Re: Fallout Equestria:Shining Hearts (Finished)

Post by Harmony Ltd. on Sun Sep 08, 2013 12:27 pm

I like it so far. Curious as to where it is going.
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Re: Fallout Equestria:Shining Hearts (Finished)

Post by alfredofroylan on Sun Sep 08, 2013 12:30 pm

Mister Frost wrote:I was wondering what was with the Balefire explosion on page 2. I would think that's not something that happens every day.
I had a lot of those on Fallout 3, everytime a car explodes you get a small balefire so I wanted to include those in the comic. (but bigger)
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Re: Fallout Equestria:Shining Hearts (Finished)

Post by alfredofroylan on Sun Sep 15, 2013 12:04 am

New page for this week :)

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Re: Fallout Equestria:Shining Hearts (Finished)

Post by Formis_Fluttergod on Sun Sep 15, 2013 10:30 am

This comic, I like it, another! Big mac
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Re: Fallout Equestria:Shining Hearts (Finished)

Post by alfredofroylan on Sun Sep 22, 2013 9:24 pm

Thanks for the comment Formis, page 4 is up right now.

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Re: Fallout Equestria:Shining Hearts (Finished)

Post by cb5 on Sun Sep 22, 2013 10:06 pm

Ensuing hilarity at 12 o'clock.

Also personally I like how this breaks FoE lore cause the inevitable hilarious antics without a doubt are going to be funnier than if sweetie bot had just found a skeleton.
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Re: Fallout Equestria:Shining Hearts (Finished)

Post by alfredofroylan on Mon Sep 30, 2013 9:47 pm

cb5 wrote:Ensuing hilarity at 12 o'clock.

Also personally I like how this breaks FoE lore cause the inevitable hilarious antics without a doubt are going to be funnier than if sweetie bot had just found a skeleton.
Oh, you may never know. Here's the next page so we are going to know the story behind this mess Fluttershy 

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Re: Fallout Equestria:Shining Hearts (Finished)

Post by alfredofroylan on Sun Oct 06, 2013 4:00 pm

And page 6 is ready, tried to keep the story as close as the FE universe and the Old World Blues spirit, behond the mother of all fails.

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Re: Fallout Equestria:Shining Hearts (Finished)

Post by alfredofroylan on Fri Oct 11, 2013 10:14 pm

New week and new page :)

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Re: Fallout Equestria:Shining Hearts (Finished)

Post by alfredofroylan on Sun Oct 20, 2013 7:14 pm

Well we're almost done with the comic, I'd like to post the last 2 pages together because they're really interconnected.

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Re: Fallout Equestria:Shining Hearts (Finished)

Post by alfredofroylan on Tue Oct 29, 2013 2:56 pm

Yes the comic is finally complete, here you can check the last 2 pages, comments and suggestions would be great :)

http://alfredofroylan2.deviantart.com/art/Fallout-Equestria-Shining-Hearts-Page-9-of-10-410277628

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Re: Fallout Equestria:Shining Hearts (Finished)

Post by alfredofroylan on Fri Feb 07, 2014 12:52 am

Hi there, finally we started the sequel to this comic. You can check it here:

http://alfredofroylan2.deviantart.com/art/Fallout-Equestria-The-Ghost-of-the-Wastes-Part-1-432356323
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Re: Fallout Equestria:Shining Hearts (Finished)

Post by Harmony Ltd. on Sat Feb 08, 2014 6:30 am

Just finished reading the original 10 pages. Very good. I like it.

Keep up the good work!  Rarity 
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Re: Fallout Equestria:Shining Hearts (Finished)

Post by alfredofroylan on Mon Feb 17, 2014 9:37 pm

Harmony Ltd. wrote:Just finished reading the original 10 pages. Very good. I like it.

Keep up the good work!  Rarity 
Thanks a lot for the comment  Fluttershy page 2 is up if somebody wants to check it
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